Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Student answer (Band 5.5)

IN MANY CONTRIES OWNING A HOUSE IS VERY ESSENTIAL RATHER THAN RENTING A HOUSE.

DISCUSSING THE CONTRIBUTING FACTORS,THE MOST EVIDENT ONE IS OWNING A HOME IS SAVE MUCH AMOUNT OF MONEY. TO JUSTIFY IT FURTHER, MANY CONTRIES HAD FIVE BENEFITS TO BUYING A HOME AND THAT FINANCIALLY BENEFITS TO PEOPLES. FOR INSTANCE, RENTING A HOME IS TAKE HIGH AMOUNT OF MONEY IN LONG TIME RATHER THAN OWNING A HOME IS JUST ONE TIME SPEND. FURTHERMORE, ANOTHER ONE OF THE FACTOR IS THAT RENT A HOME MAKES A STESS TO ARRANGE MONEY EVERY MONTH. TO BE MORE PRECISE, EVERY MONTH PEOPLE NEED TO GIVE RENT.

MEANWHILE, THERE ARE PLENTY OF POSITIVE OUTCOMES RELATED TO THIS PHENOMENON. THE MOST SIGNIFICANT IS THAT OWNING A HOME GIVE FINANCIAL BENEFITS AND ALSO THESE GIVES A FREEDOM TO DO WHATEVER YOU WISH. TO BE MORE SPECIFIC, OWNING A HOUSE GIVES FREEDOM TO DECORATE A HOUSE TO OUR WISH AND WE DON'T NEED TAKE PERMISSION OF OWNER. FOR EXAMPLE, MANY PEOPLE ARE DECORATE THEIR HOUSE IN DIWALI. SO, THAT TIME THERE ARE NO NEEDS TO TAKE PERMISSION. IN ADDITION, ANOTHER ONE OF THE POSITIVE OUTCOME IS THESE INVESTMENT, WE DO ONCE IN A LIFE. OWNING A HOUSE CAN GIVE BENEFITS.

TO CONCLUDE, IN MANY CONTRIES OWNING A HOUSE IS VERY IMPORTANT BECAUSE THERE ARE MANY BENEFITS AND ALSO GOVERNMENT PROVIDE MANY BENEFITS TO OWNING A HOUSE. AND ALSO THIS CREATE MANY POSITIVE OUTCOMES SUCH AS, THIS CAN GIVE FINANCIALLY BENEFITS OR FREEDOM TO DECORATE AND FREEDOM TO ARRGEMENT.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both parts of the question: you suggest that buying a home can reduce long-term housing costs, and you present home ownership as positive because it offers freedom to decorate. These are relevant reasons, and the Diwali example gives one point some support. However, the explanation of why ownership matters in some countries remains limited: the claim that governments provide benefits is introduced only in the conclusion and is not explained. The financial comparison is also too absolute, since buying a home involves more than a one-time payment. Your positive position is apparent, but the discussion is repetitive and several ideas, such as investment, are asserted rather than developed. Explain each reason with a clearer cause-and-effect link and a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the reader can identify the main topics of financial savings and personal freedom. You also use linking expressions such as “Furthermore,” “Meanwhile” and “In addition.” However, progression within paragraphs is often mechanical: repeated phrases such as “another one” and “to be more specific” do not always clarify how ideas relate. Some references are unclear, particularly “these gives” and “this investment,” and the conclusion repeats earlier points rather than drawing them together. Organise each body paragraph around one main reason, then explain and illustrate it in sequence; use pronouns only when their reference is unmistakable.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a small range of topic-related vocabulary, including “renting,” “financial benefits,” “freedom” and “investment,” which makes the general subject clear. However, the range is limited and several word choices or combinations are inaccurate or repetitive, sometimes making meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “owning a home is save much amount of money,” “take high amount of money” and “freedom to arrangement.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “contr ies” (written as “contr ies” in the response), “stess” and “arrgement.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. Replacing repeated general terms with precise phrases for costs, security and personal choice would make the argument clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including explanations introduced by “because” and “for example.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in basic sentence patterns as well as in longer attempts. For instance, “owning a home is save” lacks a correct verb form, “renting a home is take” is incorrectly constructed, and “owning a home give” has subject–verb disagreement. Articles and sentence structure are also problematic in “we don't need take permission of owner.” These errors can make the reader pause to interpret your meaning. Practise forming accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses while checking verb forms, agreement, articles and punctuation.

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