Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph compares the numbers of tourists visiting a particular caribbean islandbetween 2010 and 2017.

Overall the highest propotions of total tourists visited an island in between these years, while visitors staying on cruise ships this figures face ups and down. The lowest numbers of visitors staying on island.

Staying on cruise ships was not high demanded in 2010 below 0.5 millions and then increased marginally in 2011 at 0.5 millions and then declined in 2012 after this periods it shoot up yearly and reached 2 million in 2017,While visitors staying on island during the early year started above 0.5 millions and stayed same in 2011 and then increased at 1.5 millions and remained stable until 2017 in 2016 they faced little decline.

Meanwhile the total numbers of visitors started with 1 millions increased yearly and touced 3.5 millions in 2017

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the graph’s subject and report several key movements, including the rise in cruise-ship visitors to 2 million and the total reaching 3.5 million in 2017. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: “the highest proportions of total tourists visited an island” does not clearly describe the overall pattern, and the island-staying group was not consistently the largest, as cruise-ship visitors exceeded it by 2017. Some figures and trends are also imprecise, such as saying the total increased yearly when it remained level at about 2.75 million from 2015 to 2016. The response is 142 words, below the required 150. Add a clearer overview and accurately compare the groups and the plateau in the total.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a generally understandable order: it introduces the graph, gives an overview, and then describes the two visitor categories and the total. This provides a coherent overall arrangement. However, the overview and details are crowded into long sentences, and linking is sometimes mechanical or unclear. For example, the sentence beginning “Staying on cruise ships” strings together several stages with repeated “and then,” while “after this periods” does not clearly connect the change to the year that follows. The final paragraph also gives only a brief account of the total. Use clearer paragraphing and divide the trends into shorter, logically connected sentences, with precise references to years and categories.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “increased,” “declined,” “remained stable,” and “reached,” which helps communicate the main movements. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning difficult to follow. “Highest propotions” is not an appropriate way to describe the visitor numbers, and “not high demanded” is an unnatural collocation. There are also spelling and spacing problems, such as “caribbean islandbetween,” “touced,” and “ups and down.” Aim for precise terms such as “number,” “figure,” and “visitor category,” and check spelling and collocations carefully. More accurate vocabulary would make the comparisons clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine information using longer sentences, and the reader can usually identify the broad trends. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in sentence boundaries, agreement, articles, and verb forms frequently reduce clarity. For example, “visitors staying on cruise ships this figures face ups and down” has an unclear subject and verb agreement, while “the total numbers of visitors started with 1 millions increased yearly” lacks a clear grammatical connection between the actions. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly in the long sentence beginning “Staying on cruise ships.” Practise writing accurate simple sentences first, then connect them with controlled clauses. Check singular/plural forms and use full stops to separate distinct trends.

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