Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the line graph illustrates the sum of visitors traveling to caribean island.

overall, the total is increasing all the time while visitors staying on the ship and the visitors staying on island are deacreasing then often increasing

to accurate that total are increasing, which means that the main island is a preferable destination for tourists through the years, with 250 thousands of tourists in only 1 year from 2010 to 2011; for such an island we can confirm that it's highly recomended seeing other 500 thousands tourist in one year from 2012 to 2013 and another 500 thousand the year after. unfortunately we can notice a slight difference the next year 2014 with barely 200 thousands then a slight deacrese the next following a bombastic increasing the last year 2016 and 2017 with almost 1.5 million visitor in one year.

in the main time visitors stayin on the ship and the island were not alike, the one's who's staying on the island stayed stable in first year while the on's who's staying on ship

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the broad upward movement in total visitors, and you attempt to compare the two accommodation groups. However, the overview is inaccurate: visitors staying on the island generally rose from about 0.75 million to 1.5 million, rather than decreasing and then often increasing. Several details are also misreported or unclear. For example, the total rose by about 0.5 million from 2012 to 2013, but the increase from 2013 to 2014 was also about 0.5 million, not 200,000; the final annual rise was about 0.75 million, not 1.5 million. The response ends mid-comparison and does not give a clear, accurate account of the main patterns. Focus on the total and each visitor group, using selected figures that support a precise overview.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into an overview and later discussion, and time references such as “from 2010 to 2011” help indicate sequence. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the main trends and figures are mixed together in a long, loosely connected paragraph. Linking phrases such as “to accurate that total are increasing” and “in the main time” do not clearly show how ideas relate. The final sentence is unfinished, leaving the comparison of cruise-ship and island visitors incomplete. Use clear paragraphs for the overview and the detailed comparisons, and group figures by series or trend. Shorter sentences and more precise transitions would make the information easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “visitors,” “tourists,” “total,” and “increasing,” so the general subject is recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or informal for a data report. “Bombastic increasing” is not a natural way to describe a sharp rise, while “highly recommended seeing” introduces an unsupported recommendation rather than reporting the graph. Spelling errors such as “caribean,” “deacreasing,” and “recomended” also reduce precision. Aim for neutral, data-focused language and use a small set of accurate trend terms consistently, such as “rose,” “remained stable,” and “reached.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts longer sentences and uses some time clauses, but control is uneven, and errors often make relationships between ideas hard to understand. For example, “the total is increasing all the time while visitors staying on the ship and the visitors staying on island are deacreasing” has an unclear and inaccurate structure, and “to accurate that total are increasing” does not form a grammatical clause. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, as in “the one's who's staying on the island stayed stable in first year.” The final sentence is incomplete. Build accurate simple sentences first, then add one comparison or time clause at a time; check subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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