Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line chart shows the millions of individuals visiting an island between 2010 and 2017.

Overall, over time total number of tourists travelling to Caribbean island kept rising.

To begin with the year 2010 around 1 millions of people were visiting to an island from which almost 70,000 were staying on island whereas 25,000 people stayed on cruise ships. Moreover, more tourists kept travelling to a particular Caribbean island and in [redacted phone] number was more than 2.5 millions however there was sharp increase witnessed after a year which reached to its peak 3.5 during all the years.

On the other hand, there was zigzag trend was noticed in people who stayed on cruise ships till 2013 after that there was steadily increase was witnessed as more tourists started staying on cruise rather than on island and the number reached to 2 millions of visitors. While there as no change seen in people who stayed on island in from year [redacted phone], after some time tourists liked staying on island and for whole three years almost 1.5 millions of tourists were visiting although there was slight decrease witnessed but again after a year the number was same as before.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response provides a general overview and identifies some key trends, such as the overall increase in tourism and the peak in 2017. However, the reporting of data is often inaccurate or confusing. For instance, the claim that 'around 1 millions of people were visiting' in 2010 is not clearly supported by the graph, and the description of the trends for cruise versus island visitors lacks precision. The summary of the data is somewhat disjointed, and the distinction between the two categories is not always clearly articulated. To improve, ensure that data points are accurately transcribed and that the main features are highlighted with greater clarity and logical grouping.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'To begin with the year 2010' and 'On the other hand, there was zigzag trend was noticed'. The progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. While the overall arrangement is coherent enough to follow, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the occasional misuse of referencing make the flow feel somewhat forced. Improving the variety and accuracy of transition signals would significantly enhance the logical flow of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'zigzag trend', 'steadily increase was witnessed', and '1 millions of people'. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, relying on basic descriptors. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise academic collocations, such as 'a significant upward trend' instead of 'kept rising', and ensure correct pluralisation and article usage when referring to numerical data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'there was zigzag trend was noticed'), missing articles, and subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'number was more than 2.5 millions'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be distracting. To improve, pay closer attention to sentence construction, particularly the use of passive voice and articles, and proofread to ensure that your sentences are grammatically complete and accurate.

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