Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The given graph provides the information of the numbers of immigrants visited a caribbean island from 2010 to 2017.The figures are given in millions.
Overall the total number of tourists increased significantly over the period,rising from 1 milion in 2010 to 3.5 milion in 2017.While the number of visitors staying on the island grew initially and then remained relatively stable,the number of tourists staying on cruise increased sharplyafter 2013.
In 2010 the island received 1 milion tourists in total,including 0.7 milion visitors staying on the island and 0.3 milion staying on cruise ships.The total number of tourists rose steadily to 2 milion in 2013.During the same period,visitors staying on the island increased to 1.5 milion,whereas the figures from the cruise ship tourists fluctuated between 0.3 milion and 0.5 milion.
From 2014 ownwards,the total number of visitors continued to rise,reaching 2.5 milion in 2014and 2.7 milion in both 2015 and 2016 before peaking at 3.5 milion in 2017.The number of toursts staying on the island
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response provides a clear overview of the main trends and selects key data points to support the description. However, the response is incomplete, as it cuts off abruptly at the end of the final paragraph. While the main features are identified, the failure to finish the sentence and provide a complete analysis of the final data points prevents a higher score. The initial summary is accurate, and the comparison between cruise and island-stay tourists is relevant, but the lack of a conclusion or a fully developed final section limits the overall achievement of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, and there is a logical progression of ideas from the overview to the specific data points. Cohesive devices such as 'while', 'whereas', and 'before' are used to link information. However, the abrupt ending significantly disrupts the flow and coherence of the final paragraph. Referencing is generally clear, but the mechanical nature of some transitions and the incomplete final sentence indicate a need for better control over paragraph structure and sentence completion to ensure a smooth reading experience.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, with terms like 'fluctuated', 'peaking', and 'steadily' used appropriately. There are some spelling errors, such as 'milion' instead of 'million' and 'ownwards' instead of 'onwards'. Additionally, the word 'immigrants' is used incorrectly to refer to 'tourists'. While the range is sufficient to convey the main points, the recurring spelling errors and the misuse of terminology prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Improving precision in word choice and proofreading for spelling would enhance the score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'While the number of visitors staying on the island grew initially and then remained relatively stable'. There are several punctuation errors, particularly missing spaces after commas and periods, which affects the presentation. Grammatical control is generally good, but the incomplete final sentence is a significant error. There are also minor issues with article usage and subject-verb agreement. To improve, focus on consistent punctuation and ensuring all sentences are fully formed and grammatically sound.
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