Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The multi-line chart illustrates the figure of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island and Cruise ship within the time frame of 7 years starting from 2010 to 2017. Units are measured in Millions of visitors.

Overall, the figure of visitors staying on island was fluctuated, while the figure of visitors staying on cruise ships was went up significantly, whereas the figure of total visitors was dramatic increased at the end of the period.

In comparison, the figure of visitors in cruise ships was gradually increased to 0.5 millions in 2011, from around 0.2 millions in 2010, after that it was again decreased to around 0.2 millions in 2012, whereas the figure of visitors island remained steadily to 0.7 around 0.7 millions in 2010 to 2011, after that figure was slightly increased to around 1.7 millions in 2012.

there was a significantly increased in the figure of visitors in cruise ships to around 2 millions in 2017, from around 0.2 millions in 2012, while visitors staying on island remained same to 1.5 millions over the period.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers the main features of the graph, including the trends for cruise ship visitors, island stayers, and the total. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you identified the general trends, the data points provided are occasionally imprecise or misread (e.g., stating island visitors remained at 1.5 million over the period, which contradicts the fluctuations shown). To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are accurately transcribed and that the 'main features' are highlighted with more analytical precision rather than just listing numbers.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall,' 'In comparison,' and 'whereas' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. For example, the start of the final paragraph ('there was a significantly increased') lacks a proper subject and follows a repetitive structure. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence flows naturally into the next would significantly improve the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision required for higher bands. There is frequent misuse of word forms, such as 'was fluctuated' instead of 'fluctuated' and 'dramatic increased' instead of 'dramatic increase'. You rely on basic descriptors like 'increased' or 'decreased' repeatedly. To improve, try to incorporate more varied reporting verbs and adjectives, such as 'surged,' 'plummeted,' or 'a marginal rise,' and ensure you are using the correct noun or verb forms in your sentences.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('figure... was went up'), incorrect passive voice usage ('was fluctuated'), and missing articles. Additionally, there are punctuation and capitalization errors, such as starting sentences with lowercase letters. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex structures. Proofreading for these recurring errors would help you achieve a higher score.

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