Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
the graph illustrates the amount of the visitors staying on cruise ships and island while visiting a particular Caribbean island over a time period of 7 years between 2010 to 2017. The unit is measured in Millions .
Overall, total number of tourists escalated dramatically over the period . While, the visitors staying on island crept upwards. However, visitors staying on cruise ships flucua
in the initial years and surged throughout the period . Visitors stayed more on island in
In the starting year, total number of visitors started a 1 million in 2010 , showed a significant growth to 3.5 million visitors in the final year 2017 . However , visitors staying on cruise ships initally started at approximately 0.2 millions , flucuated till 2013 to 0.5 million and rocketed to 2 million in 2017
Meanwhile , number of visitores styaing on island started around o.5 million in 2010 , showed a steady increase till 2015 to 1.5 million and dropped to around 1.2 million in 2016 and surged to 2 million by the end of the period
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response provides a clear overview of the main trends, identifying the overall increase in tourist numbers and distinguishing between the two categories. Key features, such as the initial figures and the final values in 2017, are highlighted. However, the response is incomplete; the final sentence is cut off mid-thought ('Visitors stayed more on island in'), and there is a lack of comparative analysis between the two categories in the body paragraphs. While the main trends are captured, the lack of a complete conclusion and the omission of specific comparative language (e.g., comparing the cruise ship growth rate to the island stay growth rate) limits the score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'While', 'However', and 'Meanwhile' are used to signal shifts in information. However, the flow is occasionally disrupted by mechanical errors and the incomplete final sentence. Referencing is generally clear, but the paragraphing is slightly disjointed due to the abrupt ending of the second paragraph and the incomplete final sentence of the overview. The progression of ideas is present but could be smoother with more varied linking phrases.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, with attempts at descriptive verbs like 'escalated', 'crept upwards', 'surged', and 'rocketed'. There are several spelling errors, such as 'flucua' (fluctuated), 'visitores', and 'styaing', which are distracting. Additionally, there are minor word-choice issues, such as 'amount of the visitors' instead of 'number of visitors'. While the range is sufficient to convey the main points, the recurring spelling mistakes and minor collocation errors prevent a higher score. The vocabulary is functional but lacks the precision and sophistication required for higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, including missing articles ('at 1 million', 'on island'), incorrect prepositions ('in 2010 to 2017' instead of 'between 2010 and 2017'), and punctuation issues (spaces before commas). The incomplete sentence at the end of the second paragraph is a significant error that affects the overall grammatical control. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of errors in basic grammar and punctuation is noticeable and occasionally impedes the reader's flow.
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