Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
entertainment.
The table graph illustrates the number of visitors visiting a particular Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017.
Overall, the trend was increasing during the whole period. Visitors stayed on island remained constant in 2013 to 2015. The numbers of tourist stay at cruise ship were increase whole period.
To begin with, the number of tourist who stayed on the cruise ship was nearly 0.3 millions in 2010. The figure was fluctuate to 2103 and it was reach at 0.9 millions. After fluctuating, it was increase gradually to 2017, and its 4 times higher than 2013.
On the other hand, the numbers were remain same between in 2010 and 2011, it was approximately 0.8 millions. Following this, it increased significantly from 2013 to 2015, it was 1.5 millions. In 2016, it remained unchanged. After that, it decreased drastically and it was increased considerably and its 1.3 million and 1.5 millions respectively.
However, the total numbers of tourist visit this island over 1 million in 2010. Moreover, these ratio increased significantly and reached 2.7 millions as well as it remained constant to 2016. In 2017, it rose sharply.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the overall upward trend and the distinction between cruise ship visitors and those staying on the island. However, the data reporting is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, stating that visitor numbers were 'constant in 2013 to 2015' contradicts the provided data, and the description of the fluctuations is imprecise. The summary lacks a clear focus on the most significant comparisons, and some figures are misread or poorly presented, which hinders the clarity of the report. To improve, ensure that data points are accurately transcribed and that the relationship between different categories is clearly explained.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is frequently interrupted by confusing sentence structures and unclear referencing. While some cohesive devices like 'To begin with' and 'On the other hand' are used, they are often applied to ideas that do not logically follow one another. The connection between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the lack of clarity in the data presentation makes it difficult for the reader to follow the trend. Improving the use of linking words to show cause and effect or contrast would help the flow of the response significantly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic verbs like 'increased' or 'remained'. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'The figure was fluctuate' (should be 'fluctuated') and 'these ratio increased' (should be 'this figure'). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data with precision, and the errors in word form occasionally cause confusion for the reader. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate a wider variety of synonyms for trends and more precise terminology for describing statistical changes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are consistent issues with verb tenses (e.g., 'was increase' instead of 'increased'), subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'numbers were remain'), and sentence structure. The use of complex sentences is attempted but often results in errors that make the meaning unclear. For instance, 'its 4 times higher than 2013' is grammatically incorrect and lacks a clear subject. Focusing on basic sentence construction and ensuring consistent tense usage would greatly improve the accuracy and readability of your writing.
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