Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the number of tourist visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010and 1017
To begin with , the number of tourists in 2010 approximately 0.3 million and the trend was marginal increased . After 2011 the trend was dropped and the the number of visitors staying on ship roughly 0.3 .
Then the trend was gone significantly upward precisely 2 million .
In additional , number of visitors staying on island in 2010 was nearby 1 million . Then the trend was gone increased to surely 1.5 million . Then the trend was constant between 2013 and 2015 . After 2015 the direction was gone marginal decreased . THEN the trend was gone as constant .
further more , some other visitors in 2010 was surely 1 million. then trend was gone constantly leaped and touched peak .
In conclusion , in 2017 the other visitors were nearly 4 million . It was highest among all of them .
in 2012 the ship tourists are lowest among all .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the graph, such as the trends for different tourist categories. However, the information is often inaccurate or poorly described. For example, the description of the 'ship' tourists is confusing, and the data points are not clearly linked to the years provided. The summary lacks a clear overview of the overall trends, and the reporting of figures is inconsistent. To improve, you should focus on identifying the most significant changes—such as the overall growth in visitor numbers—and ensure that the data cited matches the graph accurately. The response is somewhat disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of the data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. While there are attempts at paragraphing, the transitions between ideas are mechanical and often repetitive (e.g., 'Then the trend was...'). The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes misused, such as 'In additional' and 'further more', which do not effectively connect the sentences. The progression of information is not clear, as the data is presented in a fragmented way rather than as a cohesive summary. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus, such as grouping similar trends together rather than listing them chronologically in a repetitive manner.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on the phrase 'the trend was' to describe changes, which lacks precision. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'marginal increased' instead of 'a marginal increase' and 'gone significantly upward' instead of 'rose significantly'. The use of 'surely' to describe figures is inappropriate in an academic context. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise verbs and nouns to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'a steady climb'. Expanding your range of descriptive language will help you convey the data more effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('the ship tourists are lowest'), article usage ('the number of tourist'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple and lack the complexity required for higher bands. The punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and capitalization errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures and ensuring that your verb tenses are consistent when describing past data. Proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect word forms will significantly improve the clarity and accuracy of your writing.
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