Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph illustrate the number of travellers visiting different areas in Caribbean Island from 2010 to 2017.
Overall,Visitors staying on island registered higher number desipite a stidy decrease but it rose again as compared to how visitor started on cruise ship.
According to the graph , from 2010 to 2011, Visitors staying on Island started from 0.7 and kept constant up to 2011.But in 2012 there is a dramatic increase of 1.2 and in 2013 it rose again to 1.5, and from 2014 to 2017 the number kept constant desipite a slit change in 2016 which is 1.2 . However visitors on cruise Ships registered smallest number of 0.3 at first ,but later in 2011 the amount increased to 0.5, unfortunately it decreases again in 2012 back to 0.3 again.But with time members shows interest on it and the number increased from 2013 to 2017 where visitors reached to 2.
Looking to the total number ,it started from 1 and it keeps on going desipite the dramatic changes on the visitors and it reaches to 3.5.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the trends for visitors staying on the island and those on cruise ships. However, the analysis is somewhat inconsistent. For instance, the description of the data for 2012 and 2013 is confusing, and the mention of 'total number' is not clearly supported by the provided graph data. While the key trends are identified, the lack of precision in reporting the figures (e.g., '0.7', '1.2') and the unclear summary of the total figures prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure that data points are accurately transcribed and that the overview clearly highlights the most significant trends without including confusing or inaccurate summary calculations.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'But with time members shows interest' and 'Looking to the total number' feel disjointed. The progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by awkward transitions between sentences. While there is an overall attempt at a logical flow, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the repetitive nature of some sentence structures make the cohesion feel somewhat basic. Improving the variety of transition signals would significantly enhance the flow of the writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for higher bands. There are several spelling errors, such as 'desipite' (despite) and 'stidy' (steady), and word choice issues, such as using 'members' instead of 'tourists' or 'visitors'. The range of vocabulary is limited, relying on repetitive phrasing to describe trends. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more varied synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' and ensure that you are using topic-specific terminology correctly. Proofreading for common spelling mistakes would also improve the overall quality of the response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('The graph illustrate', 'members shows interest') and incorrect article usage ('on island', 'on cruise Ships'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas and periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent sentence construction will help improve your accuracy.
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