Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The Graph depicts the number of tourists visting a specific Caribbean island among 2010 to 2017.
Overall, in 2017 almost 2 million tourists were stayed on cruise ships. and also approximately 1.5 million visitors were stayed on island. however total number of tourists which visited the Caribbean island in between 2010 to 2017 were almost 3.5 millions.
There is steadily increase of visiors from 2010 to 2011. then a graph decreased on 2012 after this can be seen a massive growth of tourists started come till 2017 with approximately 2 millions visitors. These were people who liked to stayed on the cruise ships. in addition the graph of visitors whose stayed on island was almost 1.5 millions between the period of 2010 and 2017. the indication of graph showing a gradullay increase in this period.
At Last, the total tourists who visit the specific Caribbean island between the period of 2010 to 2017 was almost 3.5 millions. and the number of visitors who liked to stayed on cruise ships was more rather than island.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the overall growth and the comparison between cruise ship and island visitors. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and contains inaccuracies. For instance, the claim that the total number of tourists between 2010 and 2017 was 3.5 million is a misinterpretation of the data, as the graph likely shows annual figures rather than a cumulative total. The description of the trends is also slightly repetitive and lacks a clear, analytical focus on the key differences between the two categories over the entire period. To reach a higher band, ensure that data points are interpreted accurately and that the overview highlights the most significant trends rather than just listing numbers.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as starting sentences with 'At Last' or 'then a graph decreased'. The logical progression between ideas is sometimes hindered by these awkward transitions. Referencing is also inconsistent; for example, the use of 'these' and 'this' does not always clearly point back to the intended noun. While the overall arrangement is coherent enough to follow, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the repetitive sentence structure limit the flow of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of incorrect word forms or collocations, such as 'tourists were stayed' instead of 'tourists stayed' and 'gradullay increase' (spelling error). The range of vocabulary is limited, relying heavily on basic terms like 'number', 'increase', and 'visitors'. To improve, you should aim to use a wider range of synonyms and more precise reporting verbs or adverbs to describe the trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'surged', or 'a marginal rise'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are consistent issues with verb tenses and passive voice constructions, such as 'visitors were stayed' and 'tourists started come'. Subject-verb agreement is also problematic, for example, 'the total number of tourists... were'. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are often structurally flawed. The punctuation is also inconsistent, with several sentences starting with lowercase letters after periods. A focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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