Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This graph illustartes the number of visitors visiting the Caribbean island in between the years of 2010 and 2017.

The given information explains the great increase in numbr of visitors in 2017 as compared t 2010 in millions on their staying rates in ships, island, and the total number of tourits.

First of all, in 2011 we see the rise in the amount of visitors staying on the ships is 0.5 million and the visitors staying on island remains the same. the total increase is same 0.25 million.In 2012 the total number of visiors increased and reace 1.5 million,visiotrs staying on island grown 1 million and but the cruise ship sisitors falled.

Seconaly, total visiotrs in 2012 to 2015 become great, increasing rate is almost 1 million every year till 2014 and a dramatic fall in 2015,the ships visitors grown half million then 1 mllion and then half million respectively, the island visitors in 2012 reached 1.5 million and remains steady till 2015. Lastly, the

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to provide a clear overview of the main trends. The information is presented in a fragmented manner, and the description of the data is often inaccurate or confusing (e.g., 'total increase is same 0.25 million'). The response lacks a clear summary of the overall trends, such as the general upward trajectory of total visitors. Furthermore, the report is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence. Key features are not highlighted effectively, and the lack of clarity regarding the specific categories (cruise ship vs. island stay) makes it difficult for the reader to follow the data trends.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical progression. While there are attempts at paragraphing and transition words like 'First of all' and 'Secondly', the internal structure of the paragraphs is chaotic. Ideas are presented in a disjointed way, and the referencing is often unclear, making it difficult to determine which data points are being discussed. The abrupt ending further disrupts the coherence of the text. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often misused, failing to create a smooth flow of information between sentences or paragraphs.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors that occasionally impede understanding, such as 'illustartes', 'numbr', 'tourits', 'visiotrs', and 'reace'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends accurately; for example, 'grown' and 'falled' are used instead of more precise academic terms like 'increased' or 'decreased'. The lack of control over word choice and the high frequency of spelling mistakes significantly limit the ability to convey information clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often cause difficulty for the reader. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'the total increase is same 0.25 million'). The response relies on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are often faulty or incomplete. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and commas. The high frequency of errors throughout the text indicates a lack of control over basic grammatical structures.

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