Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates travelers stay on island or saty at cruise ship while visiting caribbean island in time period of 2010 to 2017 .
Overall,while visiting caribbean island tourists have more perfered to stay at island however in last of 2 years travelers chosen to stay at cruise ships .
In year of 2010 ,1 millions total people visited a caribbean island most of people chosen to staying at island at nuber of 0.7 millions of visitors ,remain visitors stay at cruise ship , the number of visitors have been constant growth and reached nearly 2.7 millions visitors in 2015, staying on cruise ship and on island has same at 1.2 and 1.5 millions of visitors
After 1 year a number of visitors caribbean island have unchange at 2.7 millions of visitors in 2016,stay on cruise ships overtake and raached 1.5 miilons of visitors and remain stay at island . In the year of 2017 the figar have steady rise and reached 3.5 millions of visitors which was the highest in all given years and 2 millions of visitors perfer to stay on cruise ships while the 1.5 millons of visitors stay on island
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, including the overall trend and specific data points for 2010, 2015, 2016, and 2017. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear, analytical overview. While the key trends are identified, the description of the data is occasionally imprecise, such as the phrasing 'remain visitors stay at cruise ship' or 'the figar have steady rise'. To reach a higher band, you should focus on synthesizing the data more effectively rather than simply listing figures, and ensure that the overview clearly highlights the most significant trends, such as the shift in preference from island stays to cruise ships over the period.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by repetitive sentence structures and a lack of varied cohesive devices. Transitions between sentences are often abrupt, such as the jump from the 2010 data to the 2015 data without a clear linking phrase. While the reader can follow the progression of time, the use of referencing is sometimes unclear, making the relationship between the two categories (island vs. cruise ship) difficult to track at times. Improving the use of linking words like 'consequently', 'in contrast', or 'meanwhile' would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'visitors', 'stay', and 'number'. There are several instances of word-choice errors and non-standard collocations, such as 'perfered to stay' instead of 'preferred to stay' and 'the figar have steady rise' instead of 'the figures showed a steady rise'. Spelling errors, such as 'miilons', 'raached', and 'nuber', are frequent and occasionally distract the reader. To improve, you should aim to use a wider range of synonyms for 'increase' (e.g., 'climb', 'surge') and 'stay' (e.g., 'accommodation', 'reside') to demonstrate more flexibility.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies primarily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout, particularly regarding subject-verb agreement ('the number of visitors have been constant growth'), article usage ('in year of 2010'), and tense consistency. Complex sentence attempts are rare and often contain errors, such as 'while visiting caribbean island tourists have more perfered to stay'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and practicing the use of complex structures like relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions to add variety.
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