Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Here the graph in which a brief discussion about the number of tourists visiting a particular place in the Caribbean.
In dotted figure graph there are minimum number of the tourists visiting the Caribbean. But later on there is a dramatic change in the number of visitors about 2 million till 2017.
In lining graph from 2010 there was good ratio of visitors as compared to previous dotted graph. From 2010 to 2012 there are increasing in the number of the tourists. But due to some unpleasant moments there are decreasing in the number of the tourists from 2015 to 2017. Dramatically increase and decrease in the number of tourists visiting the Caribbean.
In straight ling form graph a good ratio of tourists vising the Caribbean. In the graph form there is a better ratio from 2012 to 2017 as compared to the previous graph (dotted and lining). From 2012 to 2017 the number of tourists has been increasing only in straight line graph.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to describe the data but fails to provide a clear overview or accurately report the main features. The description of the trends is confusing, as you refer to the lines as 'dotted figure graph', 'lining graph', and 'straight ling form graph' rather than identifying the categories (e.g., visitors staying in hotels vs. visitors staying on ships). Because the categories are not correctly identified, the information is inaccurate. Furthermore, the summary lacks a clear comparison of the data points, and the trends described do not align with the provided graph. To improve, ensure you identify the specific categories shown in the legend and focus on reporting the actual figures and time periods accurately.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is repetitive and often misused, such as starting multiple sentences with 'In the graph form' or 'From 2010 to 2012'. The referencing is unclear because the categories are not named, making it difficult for the reader to follow which trend is being discussed. The transition between ideas is mechanical, and the lack of clear subject matter makes the overall structure feel disjointed. Using a wider variety of linking words and clearly defining the subjects of your sentences would significantly improve the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic phrases like 'number of the tourists' and 'good ratio of visitors'. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'unpleasant moments' to describe a decline in data, which is not appropriate for a formal report. The terminology used to describe the graph lines is imprecise. To reach a higher band, you should use more precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a significant decline', and ensure you use the correct labels for the data categories.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'Here the graph in which a brief discussion about...' (missing verb), 'there are increasing in the number' (incorrect verb form), and 'straight ling form graph' (spelling/article errors). The sentence structures are simple and often lack proper subject-verb agreement. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and a correctly conjugated verb. Additionally, work on the correct use of articles ('the') and prepositions to improve the overall accuracy of your writing.
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