Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The rendered linear representation illustrates number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017
In an overview, it is crystal clear that majority of visitors were staying on island in initial years however the number of visitors staying on cruise ships were highest in last given years
To commence with, the number of visitors staying on cruise ships were 0.3million which incline to 0.5million and again decline to 0.3million in 2012. after 2012 the number of visitors at cruise ships rose to 2million in last given year the number of visitors staying on island were 0.8 million which remains same in next given year, the visitors fraction upsurge from 0.8million to 1.5 million in last given year
Probing ahead with remaining details, the number of total visitors on island were 1million which rapidly incline to 2.8 million and remains same in 2015 and 2016, lastly total number of visitors were noted as 3.5 million in last given year
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, identifying the trends for cruise ship visitors, island stayers, and the total number of tourists. However, the reporting of data is occasionally imprecise or confusing. For instance, stating that visitors 'remains same in 2015 and 2016' is a good observation, but the overall summary lacks a clear, cohesive synthesis of the data. The overview is present but could be more effectively integrated. While the key trends are identified, the lack of precision in some figures and the slightly disjointed presentation of the data prevent this from reaching a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally awkward, such as 'Probing ahead with remaining details'. The progression of ideas is generally logical, moving from an overview to specific categories, but the transitions between sentences are sometimes abrupt. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the lack of varied linking words makes the flow feel repetitive. Improving the use of cohesive devices to connect ideas more naturally would significantly enhance the readability of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing for the description of trends (e.g., 'incline', 'upsurge', 'decline'). However, there are instances of imprecise word choice and collocation errors, such as 'rendered linear representation' and 'visitors fraction upsurge'. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, relying on basic descriptors for trends. To achieve a higher score, you should aim to use more precise terminology for data reporting, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable', and ensure that collocations are natural and accurate in an academic context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Subject-verb agreement is a recurring issue, such as 'number of visitors... were' (should be 'was') and 'visitors... incline' (should be 'inclined'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and missing commas, particularly after introductory phrases. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage (past tense for historical data) will help improve your accuracy.
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