Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The bar chart illustrates and compares the data of tourists visiting a Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017.
Overall, it is easily noticeable that total number of tourists were dramatically increased. Moreover, the visitors staying on cruise ships were increased while visitors staying on island were flactuatly boost.
At a glance, in 2010, visitors staying on cruise ships were approximately 0.3 millions; whereas, vistors staying on island were slightly higher, arround 0.9 millions and it was similar in 2011. In 2010, the total number of visitors were 1 millions. In 2011, the vistiors staying on cruise ships were increased and it was 0.5 millions while in 2012, it was decreased and reached arround 0.4 millions.
From 2012, the visitors staying on island were surge and reached 1.5 millions in 2013, after that the result was similar until 2015. In 2017, the visitors staying on island were slightly reduced and it was approximately 1.2 millions while the total number of visitors also slightly reduced and reached at 2.8 millions. In 2017, the highest result was 3.5 millions, which was total number of visitors.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, including the overall trend and specific data points for cruise and island visitors. However, the analysis is somewhat inconsistent. For instance, the description of the data in 2017 is confusing, as the student mentions a total of 2.8 million and 3.5 million in the same paragraph, which creates ambiguity. While the main trends are identified, the reporting of figures is occasionally inaccurate or poorly integrated. To reach a higher band, ensure that data points are clearly linked to the correct categories and that the overview provides a more precise summary of the overall trends without contradictory figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, starting with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. Cohesive devices such as 'whereas', 'while', and 'after that' are used to connect ideas. However, the flow is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. For example, 'At a glance' is used to introduce a detailed data paragraph rather than an overview. Additionally, some sentences are disjointed, making the progression of information feel slightly repetitive. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would enhance the overall coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision. There are several instances of incorrect word forms and awkward collocations, such as 'flactuatly boost' and 'visitors staying on island were surge'. These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. While the student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'illustrates', 'compares', and 'approximately', the misuse of verbs and adverbs limits the score. To improve, focus on using correct word forms (e.g., 'surged' instead of 'were surge') and more natural collocations to describe trends in data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'total number of tourists were dramatically increased') and incorrect pluralization or article usage (e.g., '0.3 millions'). While these errors do not completely prevent the reader from understanding the main points, they occur frequently enough to be distracting. The student should focus on basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that numerical values are expressed correctly in English (e.g., '0.3 million' rather than '0.3 millions').
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