Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graph illustrates the number of visiting visiting a caribbean island from 2010 to 2017.
overall, the total number of tourists increased considerably over the year period. Whereas the visitor staying on island fluctuated and visitors staying on cruise ship lead steady increased steadily.
In 2010, the total number of visitor in caribbean island was 1 million. In 2014 it faced slight decline at around 2.6 million and it remained same till 2016. After 2016 it reached 3.5 million. The number of visitors staying on cruise ships was below 0.5 million. By 2011, it stood at 0.5 million and # feed before falling again back to below 0.5 million. After 2012, it witnessed significant amount of surge reaching to 2 million.
The visitors staying on island faced fluctuation over the period. In the initial year it was below 1 million and it remained the same till 2011. In 2012 it was standing just above 1.5 million and it remained unchanged till 2015. By 2016 it dipped slightly just below 1.5 million but it rose again back to 1.5 million in 2017.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response provides a clear overview of the main trends, identifying the overall growth and the distinct patterns for cruise ship and island visitors. However, there are significant inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, you state the total number of visitors in 2010 was 1 million, whereas the graph indicates it was 1.5 million. Furthermore, the claim that the total reached 2.6 million in 2014 is inconsistent with the visual data. While you successfully highlight the key features, the lack of precision in citing figures prevents a higher score. To improve, ensure that data points are read carefully and transcribed accurately to support your summary.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on specific categories. The use of paragraphing is appropriate. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally repetitive. For example, the transition 'In 2010... In 2014... After 2016...' is a bit formulaic. Additionally, some referencing is unclear, such as the phrase '# feed' which appears to be a typo or a garbled attempt at a transition. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuated', 'surge', and 'remained unchanged'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'visitor staying on island' (should be 'visitors staying on the island') and 'significant amount of surge'. There are also minor spelling and grammatical slips, such as 'caribbean' (should be capitalized) and the repetition of 'visiting'. To reach a higher band, focus on more precise collocations and ensure that your vocabulary is used accurately in context rather than relying on slightly unnatural phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors that distract the reader. Common issues include missing articles ('on island' instead of 'on the island'), subject-verb agreement errors ('visitors... lead steady increased'), and tense inconsistencies. For example, 'it was standing' is less natural than 'it stood'. While you attempt complex structures, the high frequency of minor errors in basic grammar prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and article usage would be highly beneficial.
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