Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The illustration gives information about the millions tourists who visited a specific Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Overall, the number of visitors who stayed on cruise ships recorded the highest figure, while the number of tourists who stayed in island reached its lowest point.
It is quite evident from the line graph that million of tourists stayed on cruise ships accounted lowest approximately at 0.3 in 2010. In contrast, the highest figure of tourists who stayed in cruise ships around 0.8 million in 2010. The number of poeple who visited the Caribbean island was remain stable in 2011. From 2011 onword, the number of visitors was fluctuating untill 2013.
Furthermore, by 2014, the number of visitors who stayed on island was remained unchanged at 1.5 millions.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you attempt to identify main features, the analysis is incomplete and lacks a clear summary of the trends over the full period (2010–2017). Several statements are contradictory or confusing, such as the claim that cruise ship visitors were both the lowest and highest in 2010. The report lacks sufficient detail and fails to provide a comprehensive overview of the data provided in the graph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into short paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as 'Furthermore' and 'In contrast,' which do not always connect the ideas logically. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the lack of a cohesive narrative makes the information difficult to follow. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus and that sentences flow logically from one to the next using a variety of linking words.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'millions tourists' instead of 'millions of tourists' and 'stayed in island' instead of 'stayed on the island.' The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data with precision. You should focus on learning specific collocations for describing trends, such as 'witnessed a steady increase' or 'reached a peak of,' rather than relying on basic verbs like 'was' or 'remained.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'was remain stable,' 'was fluctuating untill,' and 'was remained unchanged.' These errors indicate a lack of control over verb tenses and passive voice constructions. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences are often grammatically incorrect. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and the correct use of past tense verbs for describing historical data.
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