Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line chart illustrates number of people visited Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017. The data categorised into people staying on cruise ship and people staying on Island.
Overall, it is evident that people staying on island were consistently higher except in 2016 and 2017. In contrast, people staying on cruise ship were higher in number in 2016 and 2017. However, the total number of visitors increase considerably and it peaked in 2017.
Looking at the data number of total visitors recorded highest throughout the period. In 2010, it stood at 1million and by 2017, it had peaked to 3.5M. This represents a significant increase over the period.
Number of people staying on island were stood at approximately 0.7million in 2010 with slight increase till 2015 by 1 .5million and it dropped in 2016 by approximately 1.3 million again it rose by 1.5 Million in 2017. Meanwhile, number of people stayed in cruise ship fluctuated till 2012 by approximately 0.2million eventually, after that, it remarkably rose till 2017 by exceeding number of people stayed on island by 2 million.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
You have successfully identified the main trends and provided a clear overview of the data. You highlighted the key shift in 2016-2017 regarding the popularity of cruise ships versus island stays. However, the report lacks precision in data reporting. For example, stating that the total number of visitors 'peaked to 3.5M' is slightly inaccurate based on the visual data, and your description of the island stay figures is occasionally confusing. To reach a higher band, ensure that all figures cited are precise and that comparisons between the two categories are consistently clear throughout the body paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In contrast,' 'However,' and 'Meanwhile' to link ideas. However, the flow within the final paragraph is somewhat mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when discussing the specific figures for island stays. The transition between the general trend and the specific data points could be smoother. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'categorised,' 'fluctuated,' and 'significantly.' However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'number of people visited' (should be 'number of people visiting') and 'peaked to' (usually 'peaked at'). Additionally, there is some repetition of phrases like 'number of people staying on island.' To improve, try to incorporate more precise synonyms and ensure that your collocations are natural. Expanding your range of reporting verbs and adverbs would also help you achieve a higher score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. For instance, 'Number of people staying on island were stood at' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'The number of people staying on the island stood at.' There are also issues with article usage ('on cruise ship' instead of 'on cruise ships') and verb tense consistency. While your meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevent the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on subject-verb agreement and correct article usage.
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