Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island . Today we will discuss on it .
overall , the 1.5 millon vistior staying on island in 2011 to 2015 in this year there comparison are not but later like in 2016 to 2017 2 millon vistor staying on cruise ship . according to this now the cruise ship was on top .
when i comparison both in 2010 to 2011 the cruise ship have approuched to o.5 million and island approuched 0.7 million in this year island is better for cruise ship in 2011 to 2012 they will approuched to 1.2 million visitor staying on island and 0.3 million visitor staying on cruise ship .
in 2012 to 2013 , 1.5 million visitor staying on island and 0.5 million visitor staying on cruise ship .
in 2013 to 2014 , 1.5 million visitor staying on island and 1.0 million visitor staying on cruise ship .
in 2014 to 2015 , 1.5 million visitor staying on island and 1.3 million visitor staying on cruise ship .
in 2015 to 2016 , 1.3 million visitor staying on island and 1.5 million visitor staying on cruise ship .
in 2016 to 2017 , 1.5 million visitor staying on island and 2 million visitor staying on cruise ship .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to provide a clear overview of the main trends. The introduction is informal and includes irrelevant commentary ('Today we will discuss on it'). The body of the response is essentially a repetitive list of figures rather than a synthesis of the information. While the data points are generally accurate, the lack of analytical grouping or meaningful comparison means the main features are not effectively highlighted. The response does not adequately address the requirement to report the main features and make relevant comparisons, resulting in a mechanical presentation of data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The organization is highly fragmented. The response lacks a logical structure, relying on a series of short, repetitive sentences that follow a rigid, list-like format. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas; instead, the writer uses repetitive phrases like 'in [year] to [year]' to start almost every sentence. Paragraphing is present but ineffective, as the content within the paragraphs is not logically sequenced or developed. The referencing is unclear, and the overall progression of information is disjointed, making the text difficult to follow.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The writer uses the same basic phrases repeatedly, such as 'visitor staying on island' and 'cruise ship'. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'millon', 'vistior', and 'approuched'. The language lacks the precision and variety required for an academic task. There is no attempt to use synonyms or more sophisticated vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable'. The lexical range is insufficient to convey information clearly and effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting almost entirely of simple, repetitive sentence structures. There are frequent and systematic errors in basic grammar, including subject-verb agreement ('cruise ship have approuched'), article usage, and tense consistency. Punctuation is also problematic, with inconsistent spacing and capitalization. The lack of complex sentence structures and the high frequency of errors significantly impede the clarity of the writing. The response does not demonstrate control over basic grammatical rules, which makes the text difficult to read.
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