Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph give the data of vistors on Caribben island during 2010 to 2017.
Overall, the number of tourist raise and fall between decades. Total number of visitors in 2017 is 3.5 millons.
Firstly, in 2010 visitors staying on cruise ship approximately 0.3 millions peoples. While, after two years in 2012 decline in tourist on ship. But, after 2012 number of vistors on ship increase till 2017.
Instead, in 2017 number of vistors on ship raise and touch 2 millions visitors.
Secondly, Number of vistors staying on island increase and decrease between 2010 to 2017.
2010 to 2011 number of visitors on island was constnant approximately 0.7 millions. In contrast, After 2011 the number of people staying on island raise and in till 2015 number of people 1.5 millions.
Yet, After 2015 decline in island population. Total number of visitors in 2010 were 1 millions. Instead, continuos raise vistors and in 2016 stay on approximately 2.7 millions tourist.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the trends for cruise ship and island visitors. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks a clear, cohesive overview. While you mention that numbers 'raise and fall', you do not effectively synthesize the data to highlight the most significant trends or comparisons. Some data points are presented in a disjointed manner, and there is a lack of precision in describing the overall trajectory of the figures. To improve, ensure you clearly identify the starting and ending points and group the data logically to provide a more comprehensive summary of the trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between sentences is often mechanical and repetitive. You use transition words like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Yet', but these are sometimes used incorrectly or do not logically connect the ideas. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of the data. For example, the transition between the cruise ship data and the island visitor data is abrupt. Improving the use of cohesive devices and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the logical flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'raise', 'number', and 'visitors'. There are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'vistors' instead of 'visitors', 'Caribben' instead of 'Caribbean', and 'millons' instead of 'millions'. You also struggle with collocations, such as 'touch 2 millions visitors' and 'stay on approximately'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a significant growth', and pay closer attention to spelling and pluralization.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The line graph give', 'number of tourist raise') and article usage. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'While, after two years in 2012 decline in tourist on ship'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and practicing the correct use of articles and prepositions.
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