Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the amount of tourists visiting a place called Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. The unit measured in millions.
Overall, the total number of tourists have been increased over the period of time. When the number of visitors staying on cruise ship gradually rose, while the numbers of tourists fluctuated marginally.
The total number of tourists showed an upward trajectory, the steeply rose from at approximately 2.7 millions to 3.5 millions in year of 2017. The numbers of people who stayed on the cruise ships started approximately at 0.7 millions, the saw a considerable increase till 2015 at slightly less than 1.5 millions in 2015, before falling around to 1.2 millions , ended sligghtly rose to 1.5 millions un 2017.
Overall, the total number of visitors a demonstrates an upward trajectory, before moving sharply to 3.5 millions in year of 2018. while numbers of people in staying ships went through a mild fluctuation , before showing a constant rising trend through the projected years. Although the tendency of staying on island was low at begging, but ended the year after a marginal rise at 1.5 millions in 2017.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the overall upward trend and the specific data points for cruise ship visitors. However, the report is somewhat repetitive, particularly in the second half where the same information is restated with conflicting figures (e.g., mentioning 2018, which is not on the graph). The summary of the 'total' versus 'cruise' visitors is clear, but the lack of precision in describing the 'island visitors' (the difference between total and cruise) makes the analysis incomplete. To improve, ensure all data points are accurate and avoid repeating information in a way that contradicts earlier statements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the flow is hindered by mechanical and sometimes confusing transitions. The use of cohesive devices like 'although' and 'while' is present but often misused, leading to awkward sentence structures. For instance, the final paragraph repeats the overview provided in the introduction, which disrupts the logical progression of the report. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the connection between sentences feels disjointed. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph serves a distinct purpose in the report would significantly enhance the coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'amount of tourists' (should be 'number of tourists') and 'staying on ships'. The student attempts to use descriptive language like 'upward trajectory' and 'marginal fluctuation', which is positive. However, there are recurring spelling errors (e.g., 'sligghtly', 'begging') and word choice inaccuracies that occasionally impede the flow. Expanding the range of vocabulary to include more precise terms for describing trends and data would be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('the total number of tourists have been increased') and incorrect article usage ('the steeply rose'). Punctuation is also problematic, with commas often placed incorrectly, which disrupts the readability of the sentences. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and article usage would be a good starting point.
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