Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the proportion of Tourists people who has visited and stayed on an Caribbean island, from 2010 to 2017. It can be clearly seen that total number of visitors stay on island was significantly higher than that of other two stay mode.
To commence with, Total visitors held on first position and those tourists who stayed on cruise ships and on island were on second and third positions, respectively in 2010. Moreover, the figure of people staying on cruise ships was fluctuated over the years and reached to 2 Million.
In contras, the ratio of tourists staying on Caribbeans island was about 0.8 Millions at the initial year (2010) then slightly increased to 1.2 Millions in 2013 and dropped little over 1 Millions in next year, which intersect the people living on cruise ships in between 2015 and 2016 and reached to1.5 Millions in last year. Surprisingly, Total visitors showed opposing trend as compared to peoples stayed on cruise and on island. In addition, this figure gradually rose from 2010 to 2017 , and ratio remained between 1-3.5 Millions.
Overall, it has been evident that all three categories who stayed on different places experienced growth in their trend throughout the period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the overall growth and the intersection of trends. However, the analysis is somewhat hindered by inaccurate reporting of the data. For instance, you mention the total number of visitors reached 3.5 million, but the graph shows the peak is closer to 3 million. Additionally, the description of the trends is occasionally confusing, such as the claim that total visitors showed an 'opposing trend' when the graph actually shows all categories increasing. To improve, ensure you accurately transcribe the data points and provide a clearer overview of the most significant trends rather than listing every minor fluctuation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'To commence with', 'In contras', and 'Overall' to signal transitions. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly unnatural. Furthermore, the referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when discussing the 'opposing trend' of total visitors, which makes the logical progression difficult to follow. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus will help achieve a higher band score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task, but there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing. For example, 'stay mode' is not standard English, and 'held on first position' is better expressed as 'occupied the top position'. There are also minor errors in pluralization and word form, such as 'peoples stayed' instead of 'people staying'. To improve, focus on learning common collocations used in data description, such as 'upward trend', 'fluctuated between', or 'reached a peak of'. Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise terms for describing trends will enhance your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Tourists people who has visited'), incorrect article usage, and preposition errors (e.g., 'on Caribbean island'). There are also punctuation issues, such as missing spaces after numbers (e.g., 'reached to1.5 Millions'). While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement will significantly improve your accuracy.
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