Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The Following given Graph is illustrating the tourists visiting Caribbean Island, On X-axis of the diagram their are number of visitors from the range of 0-4 million and on Y-axis their is a count of years ranging from 2010 to 2017.

On the Other Hand their are 3 signs indicating the visitors. Rectangle illustrates Visitors staying on cruise ships, Star illustrates staying on Island, and circle shows the Total of the both signs. In 2010, the visitors staying on cruise ships were about 0.3 of a million so on 2011 their was a increase in it about half of a million and then 2012 the number falls to 0.3 again after that there is a rise from 0.5 to 1.5 million. Similarly, visitors on island in early years [redacted phone] it was 0.5 of a million and their is a increase to 1.5 million till 2015 and then their is a fall and rise. On the Other Hand the totals shows a overall rise in both of the categories staying on cruise ship and island.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the trends for cruise ship visitors, island stayers, and the total. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear overview or summary of the most significant trends. The description of the data is occasionally imprecise (e.g., 'about 0.3 of a million'), and the report would benefit from more effective comparisons between the categories rather than just listing them sequentially. While the key features are identified, the lack of a distinct introductory overview and the limited synthesis of the data prevent a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organised into two paragraphs, but the flow is hindered by repetitive sentence structures and a lack of varied cohesive devices. The use of 'On the Other Hand' is misused, as it does not introduce a contrasting point in the context of the paragraph. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the transition between the description of the axes and the data trends is abrupt. While the information is generally grouped, the progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed, and the mechanical nature of the linking words limits the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'there is a increase' and 'there is a fall' are used repeatedly, which limits the range. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'signs indicating the visitors' (instead of 'symbols' or 'categories') and 'the totals shows' (subject-verb agreement error). To improve, you should incorporate more precise verbs for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable', and ensure accurate terminology for graph components.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('their are number', 'the totals shows') and the misuse of 'their' instead of 'there'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and missing commas. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of complex sentence structures and the persistence of basic grammatical errors indicate a limited range of control. Focusing on sentence variety and proofreading for basic agreement errors would significantly improve the quality of your writing.

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