Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The multiple bar line graphs illustrate the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017.
The fuller line shows the number of tourists who visited in island every year. In 2010 around 1 million people visited. Moreover with the time visitors numbers will increase gradually. Between 2015 and 2016, around 2.8 people visited in both year but in very next year the number of tourists increased from 2.8 million to 3.5 million.
The dotted line tells us about visitors who stayed on cruise ships during their trip. Initially less the 0.5 million people stayed on ship. After 2013 people staying on cruise. The number on individuals who stayed on cruise was 0.5 million but in 2017 2 million peoples stayed on ships.
On the other hand the individuals who prefer to stay on island was more comparatively who stayed on cruise ships. But according to the graph there was a decline in visitors staying on island. We are no noticing increase in the number of individuals after 2013 who stayed on beach.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response provides a summary of the main features, but it lacks a clear overview of the trends. While you identify some data points, the description is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, you state 'around 2.8 people visited', which is a significant error as the unit is in millions. Additionally, the analysis of the 'island' versus 'cruise' visitors is muddled and contradicts the visual data provided in the graph. To improve, ensure you clearly distinguish between the categories and provide a concise summary of the overall trends (e.g., the total number of visitors increased, with a notable shift in preference toward cruise ships) in the introduction or as a separate overview paragraph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'Moreover with the time' and 'in very next year' are awkward and do not effectively link ideas. The progression of information is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the final paragraph where the comparison between island and cruise visitors becomes unclear. Using a wider range of linking words such as 'consequently', 'in contrast', or 'subsequently' would help improve the flow and logical connection between your sentences.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic phrasing. There are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'fuller line' instead of 'solid line' and 'number on individuals' instead of 'number of individuals'. The misuse of units (e.g., '2.8 people' instead of '2.8 million people') significantly impacts the clarity of the report. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise terminology for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable', and ensure that units of measurement are consistently and correctly applied throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but grammatical errors are frequent and occasionally impede meaning. Issues include incorrect preposition usage ('visited in island'), subject-verb agreement errors ('visitors numbers will increase'), and awkward phrasing ('less the 0.5 million'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, and some sentences are grammatically incomplete or confusing. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures and proofreading for common errors like articles and pluralization. Increasing the variety of complex sentences while maintaining accuracy will help you achieve a higher score.
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