Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph depicts the information about the visitors visit a particular Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017.

Overall, it is clearly shown in the graph the number of tourists were increased in every year the line followed a upward trend, However some are derecesed.

Adding the information of value of tourists visiting a Caribbean island 2010 t 2017 taking the substantial detail of guest staying on cruise ships in year 2010, 2011, 2012, and 2013 the value was fluctuate between 0.2 millions to 0.5 millions after that the value followed the upward trend in last year which was given in the graph with the value was 2 millions. Considering the information of total it started from 1 million visitors. It was keep growing till the year of 2014 with the 2.5. In year 2014, 2015, and 2016 there was neligiable difference then fastily increment value was 2.6 millions in 2017 year the value was 3.5 millions of visitors.

Turning to the information of visitors staying on island in year 2010 to 2017 the values was followed

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to provide a clear or accurate overview. While you identified the upward trend, the description of the data is often confusing and inaccurate, such as stating the value was 3.5 million when the graph likely shows lower figures. The report is incomplete, as the final sentence is cut off mid-thought, and the data points mentioned are difficult to follow. To improve, ensure you clearly distinguish between the two categories (cruise ship visitors vs. island stayers) and provide precise data points that accurately reflect the graph's visual information.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. The paragraphing is inconsistent, and the transition between ideas is abrupt. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall' and 'Turning to', but the internal flow of sentences is frequently disrupted by grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. The final paragraph is incomplete, which significantly impacts the coherence of the overall response. To improve, focus on organizing your report into a clear introduction, an overview paragraph, and two distinct body paragraphs, ensuring each sentence flows logically into the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary range is limited and often imprecise. You rely on repetitive phrasing such as 'the value was' and 'the information of'. There are several instances of incorrect word choice, such as 'fastily' (which is not a standard word) and 'neligiable' (spelling error). You need to use a wider variety of verbs to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable', rather than repeating 'value' or 'increment'. Improving your spelling and using more academic collocations will help you achieve a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('the number of tourists were increased'), tense usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, making them difficult to parse. For example, 'the line followed a upward trend, However some are derecesed' is grammatically incorrect. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practicing the correct use of articles and prepositions.

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