Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph displays the number of tourists visiting a perticular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. The data reveals the information about the visitors staying on cruise ships, visitors staying on island and total visitors.
It is clear that there were 0.25 million visitors staying on the cruise ships in the year 2010 and increased in the year 2011 to 0.5 million whereas it dropped again to 0.25 million in the year 2012 but later on visitors consistently increased and witnessed 2 million visitors in the 2017.
The visitors staying on island were 0.75 million and it remain constant in the year 2011 too. Subsequently visitors increased to 1.5 million consistently till 2013 and it remain constant till 2015, although it witnessed the drop to 1.25 million visitors in the year 2016. However, it regain again to 1.5 million in the year 2017. The total number of visitors were 1 million in the year 2010 and it was consistently increasing to 3.5 million visitors in the year 2017.
In conclusion, Caribbean Island has witnessed a good number of visitors during the year 2010 to 2017.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the three categories of visitors and the overall trends. You successfully identified the main features and provided relevant data points to support your descriptions. However, the report lacks a clear 'overview' paragraph that highlights the most significant trends (e.g., the overall upward trajectory of total visitors). While you have included data, the analysis is somewhat mechanical, listing figures chronologically rather than grouping them by significant trends or comparing the categories more effectively. To reach a higher band, ensure you synthesize the data to show relationships between the categories rather than just reporting them individually.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'subsequently', 'however', and 'in conclusion', to link your sentences. However, some transitions feel repetitive or slightly forced, such as the frequent use of 'in the year'. The referencing is generally clear, but the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and phrases to avoid a list-like structure. Paragraphing is present, but the overview should ideally be a distinct paragraph or integrated more smoothly into the introduction.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to convey the necessary information clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'witnessed', 'consistently increased', and 'remained constant'. However, there are some spelling errors, such as 'perticular' instead of 'particular' and 'regain' used incorrectly as a verb in this context. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, relying on basic descriptors. To improve, try to incorporate more precise synonyms for trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'experienced a sharp decline', to demonstrate a more sophisticated control of language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical inaccuracies. For example, 'it remain constant' should be 'it remained constant' (tense consistency), and 'it regain again' is redundant and grammatically incorrect. There are also minor issues with article usage and subject-verb agreement throughout the text. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on consistent verb tenses when describing past data and refining your use of articles will significantly improve your accuracy.
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