Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

THE PRESENTED LINE GRAPH DEMOSTRATES THE NUMBER OF VISITORES WHO VISITING A CARIBBEAN ISLAND FROM 2010 TO 2017.

AS PER THE CART, IT IS CLARLY SHOWN THAT THE NUMBER OF VISITORS WHO VISIT CARIBBEAN ISLAND WERE INCREASED BY THE YEARS. HOWEVER, THE GUESTS WHO STAYING ON CRUISE SHIP WAS 1 MILLION IN YEAR 2010 , THEN IT GRADUALLY INCREASED BY THE YEARS AND THERE WERE 3.5 MILLIONS VISITORS IN THE YEAR 2017, WHICH IS HIGHEST NUMBER OF VISITORS AS PER CHART.

VISITORS ALSO INTERESTED STAYING ON ISLAND , FROM THE YEAR 2010 TO 2011 THERE WERE 0.7 MILLIONS OF VISITORS WHO STAY THERE. THEN THIS RATIO INCREASED AND AGAIN PETTY DECREASED IN 2016 WITH 1.2 MILLIONS OF GUESTS. THEN AGAIN RISE WITH 1.5 MILLIONS VISITORS IN YEAR 2017.

OVERALL, THE TOTAL AMOUNT OF VISITORS IN ISLAND WAS SHOWN A LOT OF FLCUATION BUT AT THE AND IT REAACHED AT 2 MILLION OF VISIYORS IN 2017.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the overall upward trend and the peak figures in 2017. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks a clear, cohesive overview. While the key data points are mentioned, the comparison between the two categories (cruise ship visitors vs. island stayers) is not fully developed. The information is presented in a list-like fashion rather than a synthesized summary. To improve, ensure that the 'overview' paragraph clearly highlights the most significant trends rather than just listing data points, and focus on comparing the two groups more effectively throughout the body paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate. For example, the transition 'Then again rise' is grammatically incorrect and disrupts the flow. The logical progression between sentences is often disjointed, making the text feel like a series of isolated statements rather than a cohesive report. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'subsequently', 'meanwhile') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the data.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'increased' and 'visitors'. There are several spelling errors, such as 'DEMOSTRATES', 'VISITORES', 'FLCUATION', and 'REAACHED', which distract the reader. The phrasing is often unnatural, such as 'petty decreased' instead of 'a slight decrease'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a decline', and pay closer attention to spelling and word formation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the guests who staying', 'the total amount of visitors... was shown'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences are often marred by errors, such as 'which is highest number of visitors as per chart'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that verbs agree with their subjects and that articles are used correctly before nouns.

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