Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
the given bar chart elucidates the information about the tourists visit Caribbean island between 2010 to 2017 this bar chart show the comparisons the visitors who staying on cruise ships and staying on island in 2010 to 2011 the total 1.3 millions visitors come to Caribbean island and the 0.5 millions of visitors are staying on cruise ships and the other 0.8 millions are staying on island .in 2011 to 2012 1.5 millions tourists come to visit and 0.3 millions of this total are staying in cruise ships and the most off visitors 1.2 millions are staying in island .in 2012 to 2013 much visitors come to visit there its total 2 millions tourists and 0.5 millions visitors are choose cruise ships for staying and 1.5 millions choose island for stay .in 2013 to 2014 visitors number increasing 2.5 millions of visitors are came there and the 1 millions staying in cruise ships and 1.5 millions stay on island .in 2014 to 2015 total 2.7 are came to visit there 1.2 millions are stay on cruise ships and the other 1.7 millions stay on island .in 2016 to 2017 total 3.5 millions tourists came there and the 2 millions of visitors stay on cruise ships and the other 1.5 millions choose island for stay I think most off people stay island
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, including the total number of visitors and the breakdown between cruise ship and island stays. However, the report lacks a clear overview or summary of the trends, which is essential for a high band score. The data presentation is somewhat repetitive, listing figures year by year rather than grouping them to highlight significant trends or comparisons. Additionally, the final sentence includes a personal opinion ('I think'), which is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 report. To improve, focus on identifying the overall trajectory of the data and grouping information logically rather than just listing every data point.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response lacks paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow. The text is essentially one long block, which hinders the logical flow of information. While there are some attempts at cohesive devices, they are often repetitive or misused, such as the frequent use of 'in [year] to [year]'. The progression of ideas is mechanical, relying on a list-like structure rather than a cohesive narrative. To improve, you should organize your report into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and two body paragraphs detailing specific data points. Using a wider variety of linking words would also improve the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'visitors come to visit' and 'staying on island' are used repeatedly, which shows a lack of lexical range. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'much visitors' instead of 'many visitors' and 'the most off visitors' instead of 'the majority of visitors'. To achieve a higher band, you should aim to use more precise synonyms and varied terminology to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'witnessed a steady increase', or 'accounted for'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are consistent issues with verb tense (e.g., 'visitors are came' instead of 'visitors came') and article usage (e.g., 'staying on island' instead of 'staying on the island'). Sentence structures are largely simple, with very few attempts at complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing capital letters at the start of sentences and improper spacing around periods. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage, and try to incorporate more complex sentence structures like relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions.
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