Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph illustrates the number of tourists visiting a spacific caribbean island during the years of 2010 and 2017.
insitinally, In 2010 appoxiemately 0.3 millions of visitors haa experienced the stayings in cruise ships, While the visitors staying on island had a 0.6 million, togethar total it reprasents 1 million visitors respectively. In year of 2012 island staying had slight grow in visitors at 1 millions visitors while cruise staying had a marginal fluctuations. As the graph expressed the changes in both in by year of 2013 at 0.5 million visitor in cruise and 1.5 million visitors in island , Total of 2 millions of visitors visited both.
The stayings on island stay contant from years between 2013 to 2015 by 1.5 millions of visitors. On the other hand, The visitors staying in cruise ships has a consistent growth from 0.5 to 2 millions visitors between years of 2013 to 2017. Meanwhile , The staying in islands had a slight changes from low to marginal high between 2015 to 2017 at 1.5 million visitor respectively. Even though the total visitor has significant growth between 2013 to 2016 from 2 million to 2.7 millions of visitors around , While a sudden boost on 2016 from 2.7 million to 3.5 million visitors totally by 2017 respectively.
Overall, The most notable consistant growth is total both together in Caribbean island, While visitors in island had small shares and staying in cruise had marginal big shares.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, including the trends for both cruise and island visitors. However, the data reporting is inconsistent and contains several inaccuracies. For example, you state that 0.3 million and 0.6 million total 1 million, which is mathematically incorrect. Furthermore, the overview is somewhat vague and does not clearly highlight the most significant trends, such as the overall upward trajectory of both categories. To improve, ensure that your data points are accurate and that your overview provides a clear, high-level summary of the most important trends rather than just repeating specific figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is often disrupted by awkward phrasing and mechanical use of cohesive devices. Transitions such as 'insitinally' (presumably 'initially') and 'Meanwhile' are used, but the connection between sentences is often weak. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of the data. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that contributes to the overall summary.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains frequent spelling errors, such as 'spacific', 'appoxiemately', 'togethar', and 'reprasents'. These errors, combined with awkward collocations like 'experienced the stayings' and 'marginal big shares', impede the clarity of the report. While you attempt to use some descriptive language, the lack of precision in word choice prevents a higher score. You should focus on learning the correct spelling of common academic terms and practicing collocations related to describing trends, such as 'significant increase' or 'fluctuated marginally'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('visitors staying... had a 0.6 million'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, which affects readability. While you attempt to use complex structures, they are often inaccurate, leading to confusion. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions. Proofreading for common errors like missing articles or incorrect verb tenses will also significantly improve the quality of your writing.
See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.