Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the number of tourists visited Caribbean islands from 2010 to 2017.
Overall, the number of tourists dramatically increased from 1M to 3.5M from 2010 to 2017 respectively.
Tourists loved to stay on a cruise compared to an island in 2011 there was a slightly decrease from 0.5m to where it started in 2010, but after that, from 2012 to 2017 there were smooth rose.
on the other hand stayed on island goes opposite to stayed on curise its increase from to 2011 to 2013 but then stay constant till 2015 after that its droped till 2016 and then minor increased.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the response. While you have identified some main features, the analysis is superficial and lacks the necessary detail to provide a comprehensive summary. The trends are described in a fragmented manner, and the lack of sufficient length means that the comparison between the two categories (cruise vs. island) is not fully explored. To improve, ensure you provide a more detailed breakdown of the data points and trends, and always aim to exceed the 150-word threshold to allow for full task coverage.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a clear logical progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the sentences within the paragraphs are disjointed and lack effective cohesive devices. Phrases like 'on the other hand' are used, but the connection between ideas remains weak. The referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two groups of tourists. To improve, use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'subsequently', 'meanwhile') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely on basic verbs like 'increased', 'stayed', and 'dropped' without much variation. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'smooth rose' (should be 'a steady rise') and 'stayed on island' (should be 'stayed on the island'). The phrasing is often unnatural, which hinders the clarity of the report. To improve, focus on learning collocations related to data description, such as 'witnessed a significant growth' or 'experienced a marginal decline', and ensure you use precise terminology for the trends shown in the graph.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that impede communication. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('its droped', 'its increase'), missing articles ('stayed on island'), and awkward sentence structures ('there were smooth rose'). The range of grammatical structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. There is a lack of complex sentence construction, which is necessary for higher band scores. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb tenses and the appropriate use of articles, before attempting more complex structures.
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