Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrate the amount of tourist travelled a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2010.
Overall, total visitors recorded the highest share of Caribbean island, while visitors who stayed island and this trend experienced fluctuation. Furthermore, visitors staying on cruise ships had the lowest share of Caribbean, whereas this trend dramatic rose at end of the period.
To begin with, the highest proportion of total visitors at 1 million in 2010. However, steadily increased to 2.75 million visitors visited Caribbean. Furthermore, visitors staying on island share at 0.75 millions visitors.
Turning to the next details, visitors staying on cruise ships started at 0.25 millions visitors. this data slightly rose to 0.5 millions visitors in 2011, the it decreased to 0.25 millions in 2012. Visitor significantly increased to 2 million in 2017. Total visitors data increased to 3.5 millions in 2017. visitors steady rise to 1.5 million in 2015. then it slightly decreased to 1.25 million in 2016. then again creased to 1.5 millions visitors.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the main features of the graph, but the information is often inaccurate or confusingly presented. For example, the statement that total visitors were '1 million in 2010' is not supported by the data, and the description of the trends is frequently contradictory or unclear. While you have identified the three categories, the lack of precision in reporting the figures and the failure to make meaningful comparisons between the categories prevents a clear overview. The data points provided in the final paragraph are disjointed and difficult to follow, making it hard for the reader to grasp the actual trends shown in the graph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as 'Turning to the next details' or 'Furthermore', which do not always connect the sentences logically. Referencing is also problematic; for instance, it is unclear what 'this trend' refers to in the second paragraph. The sentences within the final paragraph are particularly disjointed, lacking the necessary transitions to create a smooth flow of information. The overall structure is present, but the internal cohesion is insufficient to guide the reader effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'visitors', 'increased', and 'decreased'. There are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'dramatic rose' instead of 'dramatically rose' and 'creased' instead of 'increased'. The range of vocabulary is not sufficient to describe the trends with precision. While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of variety and the frequent errors in word form and usage restrict the score. To improve, you should focus on using a wider range of verbs and adverbs to describe trends accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Basic subject-verb agreement is often incorrect, such as 'The line graph illustrate' and 'this data slightly rose'. There are also issues with sentence structure, including fragments and run-on sentences, particularly in the final paragraph. Punctuation is inconsistent, and the use of articles is frequently missing or incorrect (e.g., 'stayed island'). While you have attempted some complex structures, they are often faulty. A focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would significantly improve the clarity of your writing.
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