Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the amount of tourists who travelled to particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Overall, total visitors recorded the highest share of Caribbean island, while visitors who stayed island and this trend experienced fluctuation. Furthermore, visitors staying on cruise ships had the lowest share of Caribbean, whereas this trend dramatically rose at the end of the period.
To begin with, the highest proportion of total visitors was 1 million in 2010. However, it increased to 2.75 million visitors visited Caribbean. Furthermore, visitors staying on island share at 0.75 million visitors.
Turning to the next details, visitors staying on cruise ships started at 0.25 million visitors. This data slightly rose to 0.5 million visitors in 2011, then it decreased to 0.25 million in 2012. Visitors significantly increased to 2 million in 2017. Total visitors data increased to 3.5 millions in 2017. visitors saw a steady rise to 1.5 million in 2015. Then it slightly decreased to 1.25 million in 2016. Then again decreased to 1.5 million visitors.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the main features of the graph, but the information is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, you state that total visitors reached 3.5 million in 2017, whereas the graph indicates a different figure. Additionally, the description of the trends is disjointed and lacks a clear comparison between the categories. While you identify the start and end points, the lack of precision in reporting the data points and the failure to clearly distinguish between the three categories (total, island stay, and cruise) make it difficult for the reader to follow the trends. To improve, ensure you accurately extract data and group related information logically.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often illogical. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inappropriate, such as the repetitive use of 'Furthermore' and 'Then'. The referencing is also unclear; for instance, in the final paragraph, it is difficult to determine which category you are referring to when you mention 'visitors saw a steady rise'. The lack of clear transitions between the different categories of tourists makes the overall structure feel disjointed. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear focus would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'visitors', 'amount', and 'share' without much variation. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'total visitors recorded the highest share of Caribbean island' and 'visitors staying on island share at 0.75 million'. These phrasing errors occasionally make the meaning unclear. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a significant surge', and ensure these are used in the correct grammatical context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include incorrect verb tenses, missing articles (e.g., 'travelled to particular Caribbean island'), and awkward sentence construction (e.g., 'visitors staying on island share at 0.75 million'). There are also errors in subject-verb agreement and pluralization, such as '3.5 millions'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence structure and proofreading for articles and verb forms will help improve your accuracy.
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