Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given graph illustrates the number of tourists visiting a Caribbean island in 2010 and 2017 .

Overall there were a comparison between visitor stayed on cruise and other visitor stayed on island and total number of visitors were there . Island has the highest range of visitor but in 2017 it decreased slightly .

Total number of visitor have the highest range and it rose slightly towards 2017 , it was about 3.5 millions visitors . Many visitor came to visit on cruise ships or on island .

While comparing cruise ships it has a greatest range of visitor and it remain stable in 2011 and increased slightly towards 2016 about 1 millions and it fall down in 2017 .

Cruise ships has a lowest range of visitor in 2010 and increased slowly towards 2011 again it decreased slowly towards 2012 and it rose up in 2017 , it was about 2 millions .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarize the data, but it fails to provide a clear or accurate overview. The description of the trends is confusing and often contradicts the visual data provided in the graph (e.g., stating the total number of visitors rose slightly to 3.5 million, when the graph shows a different trend). The report lacks a clear distinction between the categories, and the data points mentioned are often inaccurate or poorly interpreted. To improve, you must focus on identifying the most significant trends—such as the overall growth or decline—and support these with precise, accurate data points from the graph rather than vague descriptions.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inappropriate, such as the repetitive use of 'it was about' and 'towards'. The referencing is often unclear; for example, it is difficult to follow which category is being discussed in the final two paragraphs due to inconsistent naming. The transition between sentences is abrupt, making the overall flow of information disjointed. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'range', 'visitor', and 'increased'. There are several instances of awkward word choice, such as 'greatest range of visitor' and 'fall down', which are not appropriate for an academic report. The lack of variety in reporting verbs and nouns makes the writing feel simplistic. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained constant', or 'a significant proportion'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Total number of visitor have', 'Cruise ships has') and incorrect tense usage. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as the run-on sentences in the second and third paragraphs. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around periods. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your sentences are correctly punctuated and structured.

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