Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar graph brings out number of visitors in Caribbean island during 2010 and 2017.
The given graph illustrates 8 different years and how many people visiting in millions. To begin with, In 2010 there were 1 million people visited and 25000 people stayed in cruise ships and there were 75000 people stayed in island. In 2011 this position less increased and after that in 2012 visitor numbers increased rapidly nearly 1.5 million there were people more interested to stayed in island and cruise ships staying public down.
As seen in the chart in 2013 visitors number rose as well as cruise staying tourists but island stayed public were stable 2013 to 2015. In 2016 there were 2.75 million people visited and people most preferred cruise ships staying and that time less people like to stay in island. In 2017 there 3.5 million people visited it is toped in the graph and 2 million people stayed cruise ships and 1.5 million people stayed in island.
Overall, in previous years people preferred to stay in island but in recent years people there were stayed in cruise ships.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the overall upward trend and the shift in preference between island and cruise ship stays. However, the reporting of data is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, the claim that 1 million people visited in 2010 with 25,000 in cruise ships and 75,000 on the island does not align with the provided visual data. Furthermore, the description of trends is sometimes vague, such as 'this position less increased'. To reach a higher band, you must ensure that the data points cited are accurate and that the comparison between the two categories (cruise vs. island) is clearly articulated throughout the period.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow of ideas is often disjointed. While there is an attempt at chronological progression, the transition between sentences is frequently mechanical or unclear. For instance, the phrase 'In 2011 this position less increased' lacks logical connection to the previous sentence. Cohesive devices are used sparingly and sometimes incorrectly, such as 'and that time less people like to stay in island'. The overall structure is present, but the lack of sophisticated linking words makes the progression of information feel repetitive and somewhat difficult to follow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'people', 'visited', and 'stayed'. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect word choice, such as 'island stayed public were stable' and 'it is toped in the graph'. These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the specific trends being described. To improve, you should focus on using more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'surpassed', or 'proportion', and work on improving your collocation skills to avoid unnatural phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include incorrect verb tenses ('people there were stayed'), missing articles ('in Caribbean island'), and subject-verb agreement errors ('visitor numbers increased... there were people more interested'). While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the use of a wider range of complex structures. To progress, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically the use of articles, prepositions, and consistent verb tenses when describing past data.
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