Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The provided line graph illustrates the number of tourists between 210 and 217 on Caribbean island.
Overall, the ratio of tourists visiting a Caribbean island ([redacted phone]) had highly increased. Visiting staying on island faced many down and fall. In the contrast, visitors staying on cruise ships had largely increased. Although, the total range of tourists had increased partially.
Initially, i examine the maximum number of tourists in the years of 2010 to 2017. Millions of visitors visit particular Caribbean island. Visitors staying on cruise ships started from 0 to 2 ratio , it was maximum increased in all the years except in 2012.
Secondly, i insight the details of visitors staying on island. the range of visiting remain in same both of years ([redacted phone]). However, it had faced few rise and fall in becoming years. Now, total number of visitor remain increased in all becoming years but it stuck off on 2016. Gradually, it was increased and reached on 2017.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the main features of the graph, but the information is often inaccurate or poorly described. For example, the statement that the total range of tourists increased 'partially' is vague, and the description of the data points is confusing, such as 'started from 0 to 2 ratio'. The response lacks a clear overview of the trends, and the data reporting is inconsistent, making it difficult for the reader to understand the actual changes in tourist numbers. To improve, focus on identifying the key trends (e.g., the steady growth of cruise ship visitors versus the fluctuations in island stayers) and support these with accurate data points from the graph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression of ideas is frequently interrupted by unclear phrasing and poor transitions. Phrases like 'Initially, i examine' and 'Secondly, i insight' are unnatural and do not effectively guide the reader through the data. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and often incorrect way, such as 'In the contrast' and 'Although, the total range'. The referencing is also weak, making it hard to follow which group of tourists is being discussed at any given time. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear focus would significantly enhance the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often used incorrectly, which hinders communication. Examples include 'ratio of tourists', 'stuck off', and 'becoming years' (likely intended to mean 'subsequent years'). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends accurately; instead of using precise terms like 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable', the student uses repetitive and imprecise language like 'down and fall' or 'remain increased'. To reach a higher band, you should learn and apply specific collocations for describing graphs, such as 'showed a significant upward trend' or 'experienced a period of stagnation'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that often impede clarity. Issues include incorrect verb tenses ('remain increased'), missing articles ('on Caribbean island'), and awkward sentence structures ('the range of visiting remain in same'). The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are often marred by errors in subject-verb agreement and word order. Punctuation is also inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct tense usage for past data, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and pluralization.
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