Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graph illustrates the information about the count of visitors at Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017.
To begin with, the total number of visitors was 1 million in the initial year and the count of tourists stayed on cruice ships was below 0.5 millions, while nearly 0.7 millions travelers stayed at island. AFter, the total count of visitors followed an upward trend during the whole period and reached at peak in the end.
Moving towards the further information, fluctuations was noticed in the count of visitors stayed at cruice ships which was 0.5 millions, in 2011 and in 2012, the number of travelers declined to approximately 0.2 millions and in the last year, the count of tourists reached at 2 millions. Afterthat, from 2013 to 2015 the number of tourist stayed on island was same which was 1.5 millions and in 2016, it decreased by around 0.2 million and in 2017, the count of visitors again noticed at 1.5 millions.
Overall, the total number of tourists visit at Caribbean island increased gradually and and fluctuations was vitnessed in the count of visitors stayed at cruice ships and island during the given period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, including the overall upward trend and the specific data points for cruise ship and island visitors. However, the reporting of data is occasionally imprecise or confusing, such as the mention of '1 million in the initial year' which contradicts the visual data. The summary of the cruise ship data is somewhat disjointed, and the distinction between the two categories could be clearer. To reach a higher band, ensure that data points are accurately transcribed and that the overview clearly highlights the most significant trends rather than just listing figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, including an introduction, body paragraphs, and an overview. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'and' to connect clauses. Transitions like 'Moving towards the further information' are slightly unnatural. While there is a clear progression of ideas, the internal cohesion within paragraphs could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to show relationships between the data points more fluidly. Paragraphing is present but the flow between sentences is occasionally interrupted by awkward phrasing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision required for higher bands. There are several spelling errors, such as 'cruice' (cruise), 'AFter' (After), and 'vitnessed' (witnessed). Additionally, some word choices are slightly unnatural, such as 'count of visitors' used repeatedly instead of varying the terminology with words like 'figures', 'numbers', or 'tourist arrivals'. To improve, focus on using more sophisticated synonyms and ensuring accurate spelling of key terms related to the graph.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('fluctuations was noticed', 'number of tourist stayed... was same') and prepositional errors ('reached at peak', 'reached at 2 millions'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct preposition usage will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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