Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The graph display the number of tourists visiting the different or particular Caribbean island in mid 2010 and 2017. All the things is set is proper in the diagram.
Overall, the diagram the dramaticaly fall in the 2010 this show that in the sun the tourists is the number of some or one millions and the high percentage is in the 2017 in the many visitors visit in the Caribbean island.
The visitors visit the Caribbean island in the 2010 in one million , the next year is increase 1.3 , then above the percentage 2012 in the visitors is 1.5 million , the 2013 then above the visitors is 2 million. The next year in 2014 the visitors many then the 2013. The next year 2015 the tourists is high in the 2.7 million and the next year is same increase . The last year 2017 is very high over the all years in the visitors is grater , many and 3.5 millions.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to provide a clear or accurate overview. While the main trend of an increase is identified, the description of the data is often confusing and inaccurate. For instance, the claim that there was a 'dramaticaly fall in the 2010' is not supported by the graph, which shows a starting point rather than a decline. The reporting of figures is inconsistent and lacks precision, making it difficult for the reader to follow the trends. To improve, you must focus on accurately extracting data points and describing the overall trend without inventing information not present in the visual.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed and often illogical. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and frequently misused, such as the repetitive and awkward use of 'the next year' and 'then above'. The lack of clear referencing makes it difficult to understand which years or figures are being discussed. The sentences often lack logical connection, resulting in a text that is hard to follow. To improve, focus on using transition words like 'subsequently', 'meanwhile', or 'in contrast' to link your sentences and ensure each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive, which limits the ability to describe the data effectively. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'the diagram the dramaticaly fall' and 'the tourists is high in the 2.7 million'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends (e.g., using 'increase' repeatedly instead of more precise terms like 'rose', 'climbed', or 'surged'). Many phrases are non-standard, which occasionally impedes communication. You should focus on learning specific vocabulary for describing graphs, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', and 'gradual increase'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often distort the intended meaning. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The graph display', 'tourists is'), article usage, and sentence structure. Most sentences are simple and contain errors, and there is no evidence of complex sentence structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent, which further hinders readability. To improve, you should practice basic sentence construction, focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of tenses when describing past data. Reviewing the difference between countable and uncountable nouns will also help reduce errors.
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