Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph reveals information about Tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island in year 2010 and 2017 is dedicated in line graph.

Overall, Millions of visitors like 1, 1.5, 2, 2.5, 3, 3.5 and 4.

In which line graph years like 2010, 2011, 2012, 2013, 2014, 2015, 2016, 2017.

Moreover, The line graph increase, decrease, slightly, rapidly, gradually, inflamation and significantly in year 2010 to 2017.

It can be seen that, In year 2010 to 2017 visitors staying on cruise ships value is fluctuations between 0 to 2.

In year 2010 to 2017 visitors staying on island value is fluctuations between 0.5 to 1.5.

In year 2010 to 2017 total value increase 1 to 3.5.

Overall the highest value is 3.5 and covered by total in year 2017 as well as the lowest value is near about 0.5 is covered by visitors staying on cruise ships in year 2010.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While the student identifies the main features, such as the total number of visitors and the trends for cruise ship and island-stay tourists, the report is fragmented. The description of the data is overly simplistic, relying on lists of numbers and years rather than a cohesive summary. The analysis lacks depth, and the failure to reach the minimum length prevents a full development of the task. To improve, the student should focus on writing complete, analytical sentences that describe trends and make comparisons rather than listing data points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks a logical structure. It is composed of disjointed sentences rather than coherent paragraphs. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, making the text feel like a series of notes rather than a formal report. While there is an attempt at an 'Overall' summary, the progression of information is unclear. The use of bullet-point-like lists of years and values disrupts the flow of the writing. To improve, the student needs to use linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'in contrast', 'consequently') and organize the information into clear, thematic paragraphs.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student uses basic terms like 'increase', 'decrease', and 'fluctuations' without providing the necessary context or precision. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'inflamation' (which is irrelevant to the data) and the misuse of 'value' to describe visitor numbers. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information accurately. To reach a higher band, the student should learn to use more precise reporting verbs and nouns, such as 'surged', 'dipped', 'peaked', or 'remained stable', and avoid using non-academic terminology.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. Many sentences are incomplete or lack proper subject-verb agreement, such as 'The line graph increase, decrease...'. The punctuation is also inconsistent, and the sentence structures are repetitive and simplistic. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, which are necessary for higher band scores. The errors are pervasive and often make the meaning difficult to follow. The student should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, before attempting more complex structures.

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