Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates number of tourists visiting a caribbean island in between (2011 and 2017).
Overall, three different between visitors staying on cruise ships, visitors staying on island and total. In 2010, visitors staying on cruise ship has increased to 0.5 million visitors in the year of 2011 then fells lower in 2012 and highest the visitors from 2013 to 2017 of visitors staying on cruise ships.
In visitors staying on island it started with roughly 0.7 million visitors in 2010 it follows the same way in 2012 the graphs has highly grows the path of visitors in 2012 to 2016 and after one year it falls very down in the 2017 year of time.
By total, the number of tourist visiting a caribbean island give time period if (2010 to 2017). It started with one million in 2010 it is the highest path of visitors of island it follow highest percentage of visitors in 2010 to 2016 based on last one year it has increased one million in in 2017 upto 3.5 million.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task by describing the trends in tourist numbers. However, the information provided is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, the statement that the total reached 3.5 million in 2017 is not supported by the provided graph, and the description of the trends is disjointed. The overview is weak and fails to clearly highlight the main features or significant differences between the categories. The data interpretation is inconsistent, making it difficult for the reader to follow the actual trends shown in the graph. To improve, focus on accurately reporting the data points and identifying clear, overarching trends rather than listing individual years in a confusing manner.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is frequently interrupted by unclear phrasing and poor sentence structure. Cohesive devices are used in a very mechanical or incorrect way, such as 'By total' to introduce a paragraph or 'it follows the same way'. Referencing is often ambiguous, making it hard to determine which data point is being discussed. The lack of clear transitions between the different categories of tourists makes the report feel like a series of disconnected observations rather than a cohesive summary. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear focus would significantly enhance the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'fells lower', 'highly grows the path', and 'falls very down'. These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the intended meaning. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends accurately; for instance, using 'path' to describe a statistical trend is inappropriate. To achieve a higher band, you should learn specific collocations for describing graphs, such as 'fluctuated', 'reached a peak', or 'experienced a sharp decline', and ensure that words are used in their correct grammatical context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are often marred by significant grammatical errors. There are frequent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'visitors... has increased'), incorrect tense usage, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'in between (2011 and 2017)'). Punctuation is also problematic, with unnecessary parentheses and missing commas. The high frequency of errors often causes difficulty for the reader and obscures the intended meaning. Focusing on basic sentence construction and ensuring subject-verb agreement would be a good starting point for improvement.
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