Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the figure of tourists visiting a specific Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017.
Overall, it can be seen that total number of visitors at Caribbean island had a big number. The visitors staying on island is larger than the visitors staying on cruise ships at the start of the given period but near to the end of periods these figure become opposite to each other.
In 2010, 1 million of tourists were recorded who came to visit Caribbean island and those figure goes up in the following years and reached 3.5 million visitors by 2017.
The visitors who stay on island was around 0.8 million in the 2010 and it remained same till the 2011, then a raise is recorded for the next 2 years and these figure remained unchange in the following two years from 2013 to 2015, then a minor decline occure and figure reached about 1.2 million visitor but after a year figures become the same as was in the previous year.
The visitors who stay on cruise ship was on the lowest point in the start of period recorded at about 0.3 milllion, a rose is noticed in the next year but figure fall back in 2012 and afterward a significant climb is recorded the number compete the
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, but the analysis is incomplete as the text cuts off abruptly at the end. While you identify the overall trend and compare the two categories, the description of the cruise ship data is unfinished, which prevents a full overview of the data. To improve, ensure you complete your analysis of all trends and provide a clear summary of the final data points. The overview provided is functional, but the lack of a complete conclusion and the incomplete final sentence significantly impact the ability to fully address the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate, such as 'near to the end of periods these figure become opposite to each other'. The progression of ideas is logical at the start, but the sudden ending disrupts the flow of the report. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'subsequently', 'in contrast', 'meanwhile') to connect your sentences more fluidly and ensure that your referencing is precise throughout the entire response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there is a lack of precision and some repetitive phrasing. For example, you use 'figure' and 'number' frequently. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'a raise is recorded' (should be 'a rise') and 'these figure become opposite' (should be 'the trends reversed'). To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise terminology for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'plateaued', or 'surpassed', and ensure you use the correct word forms (e.g., noun vs. verb).
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally hinder clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues like 'The visitors who stay on island was' (should be 'were') and 'a minor decline occure' (should be 'occurred'). Additionally, there are issues with articles and pluralisation, such as '1 million of tourists'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors limits the score. Focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage, particularly when describing historical data.
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