Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the graph appropriate the layout, of tourists visiting in island in 2010 and the proposed to be same in the 2017.

Overall it can be seen that, in 2010, the island set to undergo significant hiking and decline upgrade to enhance visitors experience.

To begin with, the caribbean island in 2010, in eight periods of year approximately, 0.3 millions of visitors staying on cruise ships was raising to 2011. as well as, some issue they was go diminish and after it was Rise to 2017. However, same as beginning in 2010, many individuals staying on these island around 0.7 millions one week.

on the other hand, nevertheless, 2010 to 2011 it remain constant, and after 2011 many adults also came to visited and it will raising to until 2013. Moreover, 2013 to 2015 it again remain stable then in 2016 it was mitigate and 2017 climb. Finally the total 1 millions of visitors were coming on these island and all the people know about these place so they was in 2010 to 2017 were a Escalate.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to summarize the graph, but it fails to clearly identify the main trends or provide accurate comparisons. The description of the data is confusing and often contradictory, such as stating that figures were 'the same' in 2010 and 2017 when the graph shows growth. Key features, such as the distinction between cruise ship visitors and those staying on the island, are poorly explained. The information provided is often inaccurate or difficult to follow, making it hard for the reader to grasp the actual trends shown in the graph. The response lacks a clear overview of the data.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is severely hampered by poor sentence structure and confusing transitions. While some cohesive devices like 'To begin with' and 'on the other hand' are used, they are often placed incorrectly or do not logically connect the preceding and following ideas. The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to determine which data points are being discussed. The overall structure is disjointed, and the lack of clarity in the writing prevents the reader from following the development of the information.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often misused, which significantly impedes communication. There are frequent errors in word choice, such as using 'hiking' to describe a graph trend, 'mitigate' instead of 'decrease', and 'Escalate' as a noun. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology for describing data trends (e.g., 'raising to' instead of 'rose to'). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information accurately, and the persistent errors in word formation and collocation make the text difficult to interpret.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent and severe grammatical errors that distort meaning. There is a lack of control over basic sentence structures, with many sentences being ungrammatical or incomplete (e.g., 'the graph appropriate the layout, of tourists visiting in island'). Verb tense usage is inconsistent and often incorrect, such as 'they was go diminish' and 'it will raising'. Punctuation is also problematic, with erratic comma usage. The range of structures is extremely limited, and the high frequency of errors makes the text very difficult to read and understand.

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