Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graph illustrates the information about number of tourists (in million) visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Overall, total number of visitors increase, while visitors who stay on the island fluctuated in given period of time. The ratio of visitors who preferred to stay on the ship increase at the begging, however decline in the next year. Nevertheless, soared in the next years and gives the most numbers of participants.
In between 2010 and 2012, the total number of visitors increase steadily from 1 million to 1.5, however rose sharply 2.5 million in 2014. Whereas, stay stable at approximately 2.75 between 2015 and 2016. In between 2016 and 2017, jumped at 3.5 million.
The number of visitors who stay on the ship sharply jumped between 2010 and 2011 and reached 0.5 million people, conversely the ratio of visitors who stayed on the island stay stable approximately 0.75 million same period of time. In the next year the ratio of island visitors rose steadily till 2013, whereas, cruise ship visitors faced declined till 2012. However, cruise ship ratio significantly rose till 2017 and reached 2 million, meanwhile island ratio fluctuated, stayed stable till 2015 with 1.5 million visitors but decline till 2016 and then again reached 1.5 million.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, including the overall trend and the specific categories (cruise ship vs. island visitors). You successfully identified the key data points and made relevant comparisons between the two groups. However, the report lacks a clear, analytical overview; the summary provided is somewhat fragmented. Additionally, there are some inaccuracies in data reporting, such as stating the total reached 3.5 million in 2017, which is not clearly supported by the visual data provided. To improve, ensure that your overview synthesizes the main trends more clearly and double-check the accuracy of the figures cited against the graph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the flow between sentences is often mechanical, and the use of cohesive devices is sometimes repetitive or misused. For example, the phrase 'In between 2010 and 2012' is used repeatedly, and the transition 'conversely' is used in a context that does not quite fit the logical progression of the data. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult to distinguish between the two categories of visitors. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring clear transitions between ideas would enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You have an adequate range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'soared', and 'rose steadily'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and collocation errors, such as 'gives the most numbers of participants' and 'ratio of visitors' (when referring to absolute numbers). Some phrasing is unnatural, such as 'at the begging' (likely a spelling error for 'beginning'). To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise terminology for data description and ensure that your word choices are contextually appropriate for an academic report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include missing articles (e.g., 'illustrates the information about number of tourists'), incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'total number of visitors increase'), and subject-verb agreement errors. While the meaning is generally understandable, these recurring errors prevent the writing from reaching a higher level of accuracy. Focus on proofreading for basic tense consistency and ensuring that articles and prepositions are used correctly in your descriptions of data.
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