Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graph illustrates how many number of tourists visiting a caribbean island by comparison of three things; staying on cruise ships, staying on Island and Total number of tourists visit within 8 years. Figures mentioned in millions.
Overall total tourists had the highest proportion in 8 years and the only one which climbed sharply without flucuating much. Visitors stayed on cruise ships had a fluctuating but rising line graph. In addition, Tourists staying on island contributed the stable figure compared with others.
Total visitors started from the 1 million figure in 2010 and continued substantial growth by closing at the peak of 3 million in final year. With regards to the people remained on Island had hold the 0.7 million figure in 2010 and 2011 respectively. While in 2012 it exceeds the 1 million figure and recorded the 1.5 million within the next three years and also in final year before falling round about to 1 million in 2016.
In terms of tourists staying on cruise ships holds the lowest number of 0.3 million in first year and also in 2012. While in 2011 and 2013 figures were remained same. In next three years a significant increased were recorded as 1 million, 1.3 million and 1.5 million in 2014, 2015 and 2016 respectively. Final year closed with the figure of 2 million.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
You have successfully identified the main trends and provided a clear overview of the data. You covered all three categories (cruise ship visitors, island visitors, and total visitors) and made relevant comparisons. However, the report could be improved by ensuring the data points are more precise. For example, you mention 'closing at the peak of 3 million' and 'falling round about to 1 million', but some figures are slightly imprecise or confusingly phrased. To reach a higher band, ensure that your data reporting is consistently accurate and that you clearly distinguish between the categories throughout the entire period.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In addition', 'While', and 'In terms of', which help the flow of information. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'In next three years a significant increased were recorded'. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear focus would enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'substantial growth', 'fluctuating', and 'proportion'. However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'how many number of tourists', 'contributed the stable figure', and 'people remained on Island had hold'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your report. To improve, focus on collocations and ensure that your word forms (e.g., 'increase' vs 'increased') are used correctly in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('figures were remained same', 'a significant increased were recorded') and missing articles ('staying on Island'). While these errors rarely prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they are frequent enough to keep the score in the 6.0 range. Focusing on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy, particularly verb tenses and article usage, will help you achieve a higher score.
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