Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The provided line chart illustrates the number of tourists visited Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. The three lines in chart communicates the information about visitors staying on cruise ships, visitors staying on island and total number of visitors.
In 2010 tourists preferred staying on cruise ships over staying on island. Till 2011 the number of visitors staying on cruise ships stood stable, while the number of visitors staying on island decreased reaching the same number as were in 2010.
Over the period of time, the number of visitors staying on cruise ships noted remarkable high by reaching 1.5 million in 2015. Moreover, the number of visitors staying on island grew slowly till 2013 reaching 0.5 million and afterwards stated increasing rapidly reaching nearly 1.3 million in 2015. By the starting of second half of the year of 2015, the number of visitors' in both accommodation were same by reaching around 1.4 million.
Total number of tourists visiting a Caribbean island was 1 million in 2010. Which rose to 1.5 million by 2012, and significantly jumped to nearly 2.7 million by 2015. Afterwards, it remained stable for a year. Number of total visitors rapidly reached to the high of 3.5 million in 2017.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all parts of the task and provides a clear overview of the trends. You have successfully identified the main features, such as the growth in both categories and the total visitor numbers. However, the analysis could be more precise. For instance, stating that the number of visitors 'stood stable' until 2011 is slightly inaccurate based on the visual data, and the description of the 2015 intersection point is a bit confusing. To reach a higher band, ensure that data points are cited more accurately and that the comparison between the two categories is more explicit throughout the report.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with an introduction followed by body paragraphs that group information by category and time. There is a clear progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'By the starting of second half of the year of 2015'. Additionally, some transitions between sentences could be smoother to improve the flow. While the paragraphing is appropriate, the internal cohesion within paragraphs could be strengthened by using a wider variety of linking words to connect the data points more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey the information, using terms like 'illustrates', 'remarkable', and 'stable'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'noted remarkable high' (should be 'reached a remarkable high') and 'number of visitors' in both accommodation were same' (should be 'in both accommodation types were the same'). These errors do not impede communication, but they prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on more precise collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing will help improve your score in this area.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('on Caribbean island' instead of 'on the Caribbean island') and prepositional usage. Some sentences are also slightly awkward, such as 'Which rose to 1.5 million by 2012', which is a sentence fragment. You have demonstrated an attempt at complex structures, but the control over these is inconsistent. Improving your grasp of subject-verb agreement and article usage will significantly enhance the accuracy of your writing.
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