Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates how many travellers prefer to visiting a specific island situated in Caribbean during the period of 2010 and 2017.
Overall, The graph depicts clearly that the total number of visitors rose over the periode. Visitors staying on island fluctuated but remain stable at the end in comparison with cruise ships visitors was little at eary periods but increased gradually all over the time.
By 2010 total visitors was 1 million , more then 0.5million visitors prefer to staying on islans while less then 0.5 million tourists staying on cruise ships. The total number of visitors grew in 2012 which was 1.5 million and above 1 million staying on island opposed to visitors staying on cruise ships was below 0.5million. In 2013 the total number of visitors rose to 2 million followed by visitors staying on island signicantly climbed to 1.5 million stayng on island while 0.5 million staying on cruise ships.
In 2014, the number of excursionists surged gradually in comparison with island visitors which was equal to privious year visitors 1.5 million and cruise ships visitors climbed steadly which was 1 million. In 2016 total number of visitors increased to above 2.5 million and 1.5 million visitors choos to staying on cruise ships as comapred to island visitors declined below 1 million. The total visitors numbers had spiked to 3.5 million while cruise ships tourists increased to 2 million by comparison with island visitors remain stable at 1.5 million.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, including the overall trends for total visitors, island stayers, and cruise ship passengers. You successfully identified the key data points and made relevant comparisons between the two categories. However, the report lacks precision in some areas; for instance, the description of the 2014 data is slightly confusing, and the summary of the final year could be more clearly linked to the overall trend. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are accurately transcribed and that the overview clearly highlights the most significant differences in growth patterns between the two visitor types.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing the data. While there is a clear progression of ideas, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or repetitive (e.g., 'In 2010', 'In 2012', 'In 2013'). Some transitions between sentences are slightly awkward, such as 'followed by visitors staying on island signicantly climbed'. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that referencing (e.g., 'which', 'this') is used more precisely would enhance the flow and coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'increased gradually', 'surged', and 'spiked'. However, there are several spelling errors ('periode', 'eary', 'signicantly', 'stayng', 'privious', 'steadly', 'choos', 'comapred') and some awkward collocations ('prefer to visiting', 'total visitors was 1 million'). These errors occasionally distract the reader, though they do not impede overall communication. To improve, focus on proofreading for common spelling mistakes and ensure that your verb forms (e.g., 'prefer to stay' instead of 'prefer to staying') are grammatically accurate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt to use relative clauses and comparative structures, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('total visitors was', 'visitors staying on island... was') and preposition usage. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some missing commas and awkward spacing. While these errors are noticeable and occur frequently, they do not prevent the reader from understanding the main points of the graph. Focusing on basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement will help improve your accuracy.
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