Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
the line graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. overall three line in graph the information by tourist visiting a caribbean island in 2010 and 2017 than first line is visitors staying on cruise ships than second line is visitor staying on island than third line is total . the number of tourists visiting a million .
in 2010, the visitors staying on cruise ships in 0.3 millions and 2011, visitors staying on cruise ships in 0.5 millions after three years gro up in visitor. 2010 and 2013 same visitor in 0.5 million than second line is visitor staying on island in 2010 visitor is 0.7 million of visitors than three year same visitors are 1.5 million of visitor than in 2017 visitors staying on island in 1.5 million .
the visitors staying on cruise ships total in visitor are 2 million than in 2017, total visitor in 3.5 million than highest total in 2017 3.5 million .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task by describing the trends in the graph. However, the information is presented in a fragmented and often inaccurate manner. While you identify the three categories (cruise ship visitors, island stayers, and total), the data points provided are frequently unclear or inconsistent with the visual information. For example, stating that 2010 and 2013 had the same number of visitors is not supported by the graph. The summary lacks a clear overview of the main trends, such as the overall upward trajectory for all categories. To improve, focus on selecting the most significant data points and describing the overall movement rather than listing individual figures in a disjointed way.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks logical organization and progression. The paragraphs are poorly structured, and the sentences are often disconnected, making it difficult for the reader to follow the information. There is a lack of cohesive devices; instead, the text relies on repetitive phrases like 'than' and 'in 2010' to link ideas, which creates a mechanical and confusing flow. The absence of clear transitions between the introduction, body, and conclusion means the information is presented as a list of observations rather than a coherent report. Using linking words such as 'furthermore', 'in contrast', or 'consequently' would significantly improve the logical flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, which restricts your ability to convey information precisely. You frequently use the same words, such as 'visitor', 'line', and 'million', throughout the text. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'gro up' (likely meant 'grew') and 'total in visitor'. The lack of variety in your vocabulary makes the report feel simplistic. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of synonyms and descriptive verbs (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable') to describe the data trends more accurately and professionally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There is a lack of control over basic sentence structures, with many fragments and run-on sentences. Issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'visitors... is 0.3 millions') and incorrect preposition usage are pervasive. Furthermore, the punctuation is inconsistent, and there is a lack of complex sentence structures. The errors are frequent enough to cause difficulty for the reader in understanding the intended meaning. Focusing on basic sentence construction—ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb—will be a necessary first step toward improving your grammatical accuracy.
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