Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The picture below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010 to 2017. summarize the information by selecting and make comparisons where relevant. the chart shows number of tourists visiting a caribbean island 2010 to 2017 years during. the line chart shows three lines. the chart shows millions of visitors point 0 to 4. the chart in fist line shows visitors staying on cruise ships second line shows visitors staying on island and last line shows total.
overall, the chart shows fist line visitors staying on cruise ships 2010 yeas during 2 score and 2011 in 0.5 score, 2012 in 2 score, 2013 in 0.5,2014 in 1 score, 2015 in 1.3 score, 2016 in 1.5 score and last year 2017 in 2 score. then second line shows visitors staying on island in fist year 2010 score 0.3 and 2011 in 0.3 score the 2010 and 2011 same score and 2012 in 1.3 score, 2013 in 1.5 score, 2014 in 1.5 score, 2014 in 1.5 score. the three years same score 1.5 2013, 2014 and 2015. 2016 in low score 1.3 and last year 2017 in 1.5.
the chart last line shows total fist year 2010 in 1 score, 2011 in 1.3, 2012 in 1.5, 2013 in 2, 2014 in 2.5, 2015 in 2.8, 2016 in 2.8, 2017 in 3.5.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to describe the data but fails to provide a clear overview or identify significant trends. Instead of summarizing, the writer lists data points mechanically, which is a repetitive and ineffective approach. The instructions require selecting and reporting main features and making comparisons; however, the response lacks comparative language and fails to highlight the overall growth or the relationship between the three categories. The data presentation is also confusing, as the numbers cited do not clearly align with standard interpretations of a line graph, and the lack of a clear summary prevents the response from reaching a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks logical progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the internal structure of the paragraphs is weak, consisting mostly of a list of numbers rather than a coherent analysis. Cohesive devices are almost entirely absent, and the text relies on repetitive sentence structures (e.g., 'the chart shows...', 'the second line shows...'). There is no effective use of linking words to connect ideas or show relationships between the data points. The lack of clear referencing and the mechanical listing of figures make the text difficult to follow.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The writer uses basic terms like 'score' incorrectly to refer to numerical values on the graph. There is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary suitable for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'increased steadily'. The language is restricted to simple, functional words that fail to convey the information with any precision. Frequent errors in word choice and the lack of variety in expression significantly hinder the quality of the response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammar is characterized by frequent errors that often impede clarity. There is a lack of control over basic sentence structure, with many fragments and run-on sentences. Punctuation is inconsistent, and there are numerous errors in capitalization and article usage. The response relies almost exclusively on simple sentence structures, and there is no evidence of complex grammatical forms. The frequent errors in basic syntax and the repetitive nature of the sentence construction indicate a very limited command of English grammar.
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