Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph illustrated the number of visiting Caribbean Island between 2010 and 2017.
Overall, it is clear that the highest number of tourists visiting the island was in 2017. While few tourists visit island was in 2010.
Looking first at the detail, it can be seen that the total number of visitors of Caribbean in 2017 was 3.5 million. The number of visitors who stayed on the islanding 2010 was same as 2011. then number doubled in 2013. In comparison, tourists were lower than 2017.
Turning to remaining figure, in 2010 to 2013 number of visitors staying on cruise. While in 2014 to 2017 most visitors staying on island. Overall, the figure shows a clear increased during the given period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. While you have attempted to summarize the main features, the analysis is underdeveloped and lacks sufficient detail. For instance, you mention that the number of visitors 'doubled in 2013' and that there was a 'clear increased' (increase) during the period, but the data points are not consistently accurate or clearly presented. The comparison between cruise and island stayers is vague and lacks specific figures to support the claims. To improve, ensure you provide a more comprehensive overview with specific data points for the beginning, middle, and end of the period to fully satisfy the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression is hindered by awkward phrasing and a lack of cohesive devices. Transitions like 'Looking first at the detail' and 'Turning to remaining figure' are somewhat mechanical and do not always flow naturally into the next point. Additionally, some sentences are fragmented or grammatically incomplete, such as 'While few tourists visit island was in 2010', which makes the relationship between ideas difficult to follow. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') to connect your sentences and ideas more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'number of visitors' and 'staying on the island' throughout the text. There are also errors in word formation and collocation, such as 'islanding 2010' instead of 'in 2010' and 'clear increased' instead of 'clear increase'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a more varied range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a significant rise'. Expanding your lexical range will help you describe the data with more precision and sophistication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with verb tenses ('The graph illustrated' should be 'illustrates'), article usage ('visiting Caribbean Island' should be 'visiting the Caribbean island'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple, and there is a lack of complex structures. For example, 'The number of visitors who stayed on the islanding 2010 was same as 2011' contains multiple errors in grammar and word choice. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and practicing the construction of complex sentences using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions.
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