Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This diagram tell us the number of people who visit caribbean island from 2010 to 2017 we can clearly see the number of tourist increase several million people visist caribbean island

this chart explain how many tourist visit caribbean island since 2010 to 2017 this picture also tell us how many people stay on shipis and how many people stay on island the number of tourist increase in the some past years millions of people visit caribbean island

In this picture we can see that in 2010 there is only 1 million people visit caribbean island and time by time this number would be increase now this number would touch about 3.5 million tourist every year this chart also tell us how many tourist stay on ships and how many tourist prefer to stay on island in the past years there is only several million ourist visit on caribbean island but now this digit would be double

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to summarize the graph but fails to provide a clear overview or highlight key features effectively. While it mentions the increase in tourist numbers, it lacks specific data points or comparative analysis between the two categories (visitors staying on ships versus those on the island). The information is repetitive and lacks the analytical depth required for an Academic Task 1 response. The description of the trends is vague, and the failure to distinguish between the two data sets provided in the graph results in a limited response that does not fully address the prompt's requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical organization. It is composed of short, disjointed sentences and repetitive paragraphs that do not flow well. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, making the text feel like a series of disconnected statements rather than a structured report. Paragraphing is present but does not serve to organize the information logically, as the same points are repeated across different sections. The lack of clear progression makes the text difficult to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'this diagram tell us', 'this chart explain', and 'this picture also tell us' are used repeatedly, indicating a limited range of language. There is no attempt to use academic vocabulary or precise terminology related to data description (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained steady'). The word choice is often inaccurate, such as using 'digit' to refer to a total number of tourists. The limited range of vocabulary restricts the ability to convey information clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'This diagram tell us'), tense usage (e.g., 'this number would be increase'), and article usage. The sentence structures are simple and repetitive, with almost no attempt at complex sentence construction. Punctuation is largely absent, with run-on sentences and a lack of capitalization, which makes the text difficult to read. The high frequency of errors indicates a lack of control over basic grammatical structures.

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